a thousend worlds apart
and yet i still hear your heart.
it's beating soft and stedy
and yet i feel sad that you're far away.
i see you in the dark casle but you're not evil
i see you on your way toword me and yet im not scared
i love you all the way no matter how far apart we are.
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt by Riamh.
600 points, ended September 21, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Basically, the poem is ok, but the mis-spellings are very distracting and completely take away from it.
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"a thousend worlds apart" ~ (should be thousand)
"it's beating soft and stedy" ~(should be steady)"in the dark casle " ~ (should be castle)
"your way toword me" ~ (should be toward)
Good luck in the contest
SarahJane
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