"happy endings
are for people who
care too much
to let the bad things
slide."
your tongue stumbled
against the palpitations
of my wrist
and lashed your voice out
into empty air.
(a whip probably
would have been
less painful-)
but i agreed;
swallowing the ache
in my chest
& picked it clean of
its elasticity - -
only for it to crawl between
the columns of my spine
and kick the air
from my lungs
when i said goodbye,
i never meant
forever.
Author notes
16/100
obligatory sentence: that's what you get when you let your heart win.
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A contest entry
- 40 song titles. by etoile.
600 points, ended September 29, 2008, 35 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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when i said goodbye,
i never meant
forever.
The last stanza of this poem is amazing. Nothing needs to be done to this poem. It's perfect the way it is.
Megan -
Read the rules Please.
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What rule am I breaking?
The sentence is in my AN, I haven't bashed anyone or used sticky caps.. is there something that I'm missing?
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that was very very good. I enjoyed the opening quote and how you wrote this.
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Aww, hon, you don't need my help at all. This was deserving of gold. Seventeen going on forty, and it's reverse for moi. lol.
Excellent, my only words of advice are; don't forget, always, always show up to the page. Okay?
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this is absolutely amazing. i loved every word. it would be impossible for me to pick out my favourite part because honestly this whole write was beautiful. i love the way you used the title.
the imagery is amazizng and your wording is beautiful.
thanks for entering
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your tongue stumbled
against the palpitations
of my wrist
and lashed your voice out
into empty air.
wow. your descriptions are intense
and wonderful.
I am so jealous.
you're going to win this, hands down.
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