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Forever together

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Though they banish you from paradise,

 for you I will gladly sacrifice,
I have given you my heart and now my soul.
Should they cast you down into the chasm,

 if the Earth in cruelest spasm,
swallows us; I’ll gladly pay that toll.

You are all the reason that I live

 no one else could give all that you give
you are all of life to me and you must know
What the future holds we’ll face as one

 so let the worst they have be done,
where you are forced to walk is where I’ll go.

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  • toomysterious
    September 13, 2008
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    Extremely romantic and uplifting, sounds pretty heavenly.

  • carole21
    September 13, 2008

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    nicely penned for the prompt . . lovely sentiments . . liked "for you I will gladly sacrifice" and "where you are forced to walk is where I'll go" . . congrats on the gold


  • spiritualangel
    September 13, 2008

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    no one else could give all that you give
    you are all of life to me and you must know
    What the future holds we’ll face as one

    so let the worst they have be done,
    where you are forced to walk is where I’ll go.

    Beautiful. Best of Luck.

  • Soft-Rain
    September 10, 2008

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    This was so beautiful, I agree with kat love is such a powerful emotion. Your protection is very clear in this well penned write.

    Wonderfully done,
    ~Lisa~

  • K a t gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    the imagery through out this poem is wonderful. I really enjoyed reading this poem. Love is a powerful emotion no matter where we are. You've captured that in this poem, you did a beautiful job. I love the entire poem very much

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • ShelleyA gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    A good write. Heartfelt. Good flow, rhyme and tone. Nice imagery . Deep expression of emotion. Unique rhyme scheme. Nice rhythm. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. A much enjoyed read. Best wishes in the contest.


  • Crazy Coconut
    September 8, 2008

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    very sweet and loving. Shows a very beautiful quality known as strength. best of luck to you in the contest. ~CC~

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