If God did not want us to fly
God had not given us
hearts who dream of passion
brains that strives too far
Let us construct our own wings
all of us who have found our shells too hard
us with the heat of fire in our hearts
the fire that fights and prays
let us see how high we can fly
take me with you over the sea
let me taste the salt from underneath
let us find an island of our own
for too long have we wanted
for too long, we have flapped
the arms like clipped wings
thought like a lump of cement
gravity a left behind umbilical cord
securities pumping reef knot
arms folded to protect
what witch should be exempted
our number hamper and weigh
congestion, which hugs and stick
ostensive needs that ties and attract
hide what is really there
arrogance and pride depressing
love in the form of chains and locks
quest in the form of duty and rescue
umbilical cord, the cement around our feet
feelings and thoughts deeply buried
the soul trapped among the intestines and bones
moon hidden behind the sun's glare
starvation of crossed arms and legs
let us build our exoskeletons
let the world withhold its sigh
stop the umbilical cords dead pulse
the soul free from the ribs and blood
A contest entry
- project un-cliche by hks.
800 points, ended October 3, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fav Me by SomeonesToySoldier.
2625 points, ended October 8, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Thank You 4 Entering our Contest Project Un-Cliche
Hello there. I am a judge for the above mentioned contest and I really must say this is a mighty fine poem you have penned here. I love the overall unique methaphorical phrasings through out the poem and also enjoyed the over all concept to the poem too. any ways good work and good luck in the contest(s)
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Wow this was so beautifully penned.
Such raw emotions, and depth that pours
from your words which speak volumes.
These lines touched me most
"feelings and thoughts deeply buried
the soul trapped among the intestines and bones
moon hidden behind the sun's glare
starvation of crossed arms and legs"
--that has left such a vivid mental image in my head,
so emotional, deep, and heart-tugging.
This was a very powerful write.
Wonderful metaphors.
Thanks so much for sharing
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gah!!!
i can see why you love this so much
it is amazing!
gah i loved every word
and you have no idea
you have really convinced me that you should be in my family!
so amazing
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This is a piece of truth. There is so much about life, and our own ability to dream that allows us to fly in our own hearts.
You've penned a piece that is simple, and through its simplicity, very clear in its meaning.
Excellent use of imagery in the last two stanzas, very powerful.
Welcome to Allpoetry and I hope that you enjoy your stay
Should you have any questions, please feel free to ask me
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hey! i found the reply button!
thank you. it funny, i translated that text from swedish, but somehow it got simpler and clearer in english, although it lost other things along the way.
well, tank you, again. im still a bit to confused by this site to have any specific questions, so ill just learn along the way.
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