we waited for seasons
to sink
and slowly
no children came around
with their kites
lilies kept their eyes and faces
rinsing in mornings
one day
tinyfooted buddha-boy
tiptoed from nowhere,
read my crumpled poetry
and sacrificed it to the sun.
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he stole your sister’s flower, didi
I told you
while you slept like Lalon’s faith
go back to sleep, nightfall
go back.
Author notes
didi- sister.
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lalon
i chose flowers.
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this is wonderful...
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'one day
tinyfooted buddha-boy
tiptoed from nowhere,
read my crumpled poetry
and sacrificed it to the sun.'
this in particular is lovely- so much to love in this poem-
lilies kept their eyes and faces?... i am a little lost with that?..
love this piece as a whole esha dear...
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it confuses me too
...because i forgot to remove those brackets... lol, whew i think you figured that out... damn the internet!!! i wish i had it before today... oh well wait for a few more days... i will be back to you... i promise 
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this took my heart, and turned it back. my nickname, for my family, is DeeDee.
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thanks for reading DeeDee.
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suzi and i both found the strongest part of this and cherished it!
now with this and suzies... what am i doing lol...
so strong, so unique and real
and
soft
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thanks thanks thanks
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this poem has the softness of a lullaby even though it's an action packed drama
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action packed drama....LOLOLOLOLOLOL okay thanks... you remind me of namita...
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'one day
tinyfooted buddha-boy
tiptoed from nowhere,
read my crumpled poetry
and sacrificed it to the sun.'
this...and the dialog that follows -- breathtaking, esha
I love you
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i love you too
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i absolutely love the first two stanzas esha. you have so much versatility with your writing. only qualm maybe 'sacrificed it to the sun'? i loved the lalon reference, and the ending, mmmmmmmm
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i love you
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