I stood on the corner,
ice-cream in hand
and a couple walked out the shop
looking ever so bland.
They approached a policeman
placing a ticket on a van,
then asked, "please be nice,
to me and my joanne."
The officer apologized
but did what had to be done,
slapping the ticket on the windshield
an argument begun.
"You stupid Nazi,
just give me a break!",
it soon became obvious that
shouting was a mistake.
He wrote another ticket
for a broken headlight,
and what the woman then shouted
was very impolite.
This pattern continued
for a little while more,
and then the officer's expression
was hard to ignore.
"Oh well, it's time to go to the taxi
that's waiting for us over there,
and I must say: with that person's van
you've been very unfair!"
Author notes
Fun things that happen outside the local eh...
Hope you guys like it 
A contest entry
- MUDSLIDE HUMOR CONTEST ROUND #2- invite only- for all finalist of 1st rounds 10 contest ~#119~ by Roaddog Wolf.
1225 points, ended September 21, 2008, 12 entries
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Comments
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very fun
Very clever and fun to read, I really enjoyed it. The rhyming is great, your word choice didn't turn out awkward as I would have expected for such a strict pattern. Well done and I look forward to reading more of your pieces.
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made me laugh great write,
well done.
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oh now I wonder what colour is red.....can just imagine the look on that officer's faceYou spin a great tale and kept me guessing to the ending... Nicely penned.
Good luck in the contest.
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Oh that is too much, have to try that some time, just kidding, this was a fun read, great closing
thanks for your entry and best of luck in the contest judging.
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You might want a new font colour. This one is a tad hard to read.
Little errors corrected:
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"Please be nice,
to me and my Joanne."
" Joanne and me if you're so picky you'd sacrifice the rhyme xD.
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"You stupid Nazi,
just give me a break!"
it soon became obvious that
shouting was a mistake.
" took out a redundant comma
"that's waiting for us over there,"
apostrophe for conjunction
This is one of the best humour pieces I've read in awhile. Nice twist, very good
You may consider rewording areas where the rhythm feels rushed.
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LOL!This was great!It really was!I ROTFL till my sides hurt!Great job!
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Wow this is really funny. The end caught me completely by surprise, and I think it is a riot. Best of luck in the contest with this piece. It's really something!!
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This poem is charming and has me laughing out loud to myself!! LOL!!!
Ending is just halarious!!
darlintlc
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