Take the brush of a fingertip
against a hammering heart.
Fold in a mixture of lust and confusion
in thoughful doses.
Add two dashes of charm,
a hint of insanity,
stir but do not shake.
A pinch of laughter
with a wedge of desire
and a playful glance.
Add spice of common interest
to really make this work
then shake shake shake.
By this stage, some heat should occur
but by the end of this recipe
ice will emerge
as seems to be inevitable
in this chaotic concoction.
Remove any excess common sense
fold in some envy and
pile on the insecurities
to mimick most cocktails of this nature.
Sample and sour or sweeten to taste
with a light dose of mistrust or a
hefty dose of attatchement.
Serve in a glass of soul
littered with hormones
and call it love.
Author notes
Lol hey you know I quite like it. Very fun to write. As much fun to read??
Let me know what I left out and don't say heartbreak coz it don't fit.
A contest entry
- 30 Titles by xxRainbowDawnxx.
3000 points, ended September 27, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest Critique - How Do You Like My Soul?
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By this stage, some heat should occur
but by the end of this recipe
ice will emerge
as seems to be inevitable
wow. amazing words
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Love how you use some imagination to write this piece, it's all fun and expressive in many ways... Love how it's like a receipe
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Very fun to read, I love the way you put this together. Its very creative, I really love it.
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Haha nice i shall cook this for supper
It sounds yummy.
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WOW! as always your writing is simply mindblowing...absolutely loving this piece. I totally agree with your AN - heartbreak does not belong here..BUT! would overindulgence of this marvelous cocktail not lead to it? lol...Thanks for sharing, and all the best to you in the contest,
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aww this is really well made!! I love your rhyme scheme in this and I can tell this is really personal to your heart your flow is alittle off but that's ok all my love
-kitty xxx -
I loved it, everything asbout it wass just perfect, I loved the ideas you put across and the way you did it was fantastic great work
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