Words are meaningless
without passion to love
or eyes to know
their story.
A contest entry
- 13 Words Only for this Picture IX by Manda Kathryn.
300 points, ended September 15, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Feel free to be as critical (or not) as you like...
Comments
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How beautifully real your words are
♥
Thank You & Best of Luck!
Stay safe
~Manda
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I do like where you took this.
Good luck in the contest
Juls
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Lol
I would not like to tell my story of passion and locking eyes.
either by words or dumb shiraz.
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I'm sorry but here I disagree with your words. The eyes is not the only way to know a story and is the least way to do so.
maybe you should of said
or our souls knowing their story.
Same count of words. Just an idea for you. It is not to imply your work isn't good, it just says that this is the was I interpetated it. Good luck.
Rose -
Yes this is exactly true, without the eyes to know their story or the passion to want to, words are empty. Well done on a great interpretation of the prompt. Best to you in the contest
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Very nice write, my best wishes in the contest.
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How true this is! Very well penned. Best of luck in the contest.
SJ
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This is awesome. Normally, I can't stand shorter poems, but you did beautifully here. Nice write!
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You've taken the image and moved beyond it effortlessly. The last two lines really bring it home. Best wishes in the comp
Deb
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