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Parchment

Upon parchment
marks left by
a life lived,
letting someone know

I breathed...

                                                  

                                         

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  • mysty rain
    September 15, 2008

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    This is hauntingly beautiful. We all have the desire to be remembered. You have said this in so few words. Well done and good luck in the contest. Your friend in Poetry, Mysty Rain


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    September 15, 2008

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    I had a Casanova flashback where his sitting there writing his memoir ... an excellent take on the picture

    ♥
    Thank You & Best of Luck!
    Stay safe
    ~Manda


  • fortyninereasons gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    Your words work perfectly with the prompt, they could stand alone and still be great.
    Lovely piece you have penned here
    Love
    Juls


  • Luckintheshadows
    September 14, 2008

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    Beautiful take on the prompt...I love the 'immortality' of this creation. Thanks for sharing,

    Luck.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    This is really insightful. You have said so much effortlessly. Well done. Good luck in the contest.


  • nature
    September 14, 2008
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    Very deep

    I breathed... how wonderfully you come to life after death.


  • transit
    September 14, 2008

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    ooo

    a very imopactful poem with good imagery. There was an air of mystery which was perfect for the picture. The reflection on the past is interesting too. Good luck!

    transit~


  • PrincessOfFire
    September 14, 2008

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    Simple but powerful words. So many loose the opputunity to voice their true last words and yet you have now. Very well written. Rose


  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    I wonder sometimes if anything here on the net will be left when we are gone, any trace we were here? This made me think harder about it. Best to you in the contest


  • Topaze gold member
    September 14, 2008
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    Very nicely dne, my best wishes always.


  • banrion
    September 14, 2008

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    This really sounds lonesome....beautifully written. It says a lot in those few words. *hugs*

    SJ

  • AutumnGypsy gold member
    September 13, 2008
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    I think I feel this way, wonder what will be left behind someday when all is said and done. Wonderful 13 words. Best to you in the contest


  • Weltt
    September 8, 2008
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    Definately the words of a poet. This is a great use of 13 words. best of luck Jet!!


  • Lil-Bit Crazy
    September 8, 2008

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    i really like this... great use of 13 words... awesome....... love it.... thanks for sharing and good luck sis in this contest......!


  • Black Narcissus gold member
    September 8, 2008
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    Excellent

    13 words of pure poetry.


  • mysticstorm gold member
    September 8, 2008
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    Beautiful! You stepped softly out of the box and wrote such depth in so few words...excellent job!


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Awesome poem
    Speaks volumes in such few words
    Best wishes to you hun
    Julie x


  • Cannonsfire
    September 8, 2008
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    lever sissy C


  • Lady Australis silver member
    September 8, 2008
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    beautiful flower angel
    ouching in so few words
    i love you

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