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under aurulent skies

under the aurulent Aegean skies 

the bireme slept silently

lying at anchor on shores 

distant, strange, enchanted

a bed of azuline sea 

rocking slowly, ever so gently,

to and fro. quiet, peace, solitude 

gave the beach a quality d’or.

sands reflecting sun and sky

not a soul seen, incessant sea gulls

circled and sang sad calls

above this dreamland home.

surprised, landing on such a shore,

Agamemnon, commander of Achaeans,  

who spilt the sanguineous life 

of honorable men, cried mighty tears.

the stench of his stained hands 

and cap, in robes argent then atrous, 

rapidly drove away even 

the foul, verminous gulls!

 

Author notes

Author's Notes:  This fantasy poem was inspired by the contest's choice of colors, color names, it's quote in the style of T. S. Eliot and the history of the Trojan Wars! It is written in a style reminiscent of e.e. cummins, but with a very contemporary style and form twist!

I could not come up with a poem that fit with the entire colored picture, the chosen colors and the entire quotation! Disqualify me, if you must, but this is my best effort entry to the contest:  

99 GRAPHICS OF GOLD ON THE WALL...A Quote & Colour Theme

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  • whatami
    September 13, 2008
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    Very clear language. Ace word choice. There's a cool history lesson weaved in this. Thanks.

  • davidwright silver member
    September 9, 2008
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    Not sure I fully get the drift of this one but still an excellent read. Happy trails


  • tomisb
    September 8, 2008

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    I enjoyed this. The language clear, the images sharp and striking. only one small complaint and it really is a matter of preference.
    "rocking slowly, not gently," The phrase not gently does not tell me what it is it monotous, bilious, is it the sway of a prequel for a storm.
    Not gentlly feels like a cop out and I can imagine you not having a word apt and fit for description. 'nuff said. My short time in the newsletter business has made itself heard. Best of luck in the contest. The last verse is really and truly the best for last, truly so rich it almost stands alone.
    Peace & Light,
    Tom B.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    This is rich in tone and colour...
    you even have the reader arrive at a
    sardonic end! I do admire this write,
    even though I am used to a bit more
    punctuation. Still, I had no problem
    following the threads here and the
    language was completely engaging.
    Note: 'brireme' should read bireme
    Thank-you for a fine entry, Blue


  • Rose Angel gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Words, scene all awesome..A different write than I have seen...Terrific and I wish you well in this contest!

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