We didn't come to live here to invest,
in stock or build net worth for money's sake
I didn't bring my fledglings here to nest
imagining the course that life would take.
Yet, lashes have been shaved from window panes
fresh paint has been applied in dull, drab tints.
The scarred up, rocking chair with grape juice stains
is gone with photographs and fingerprints.
Thin, desperate echoes pace across these walls
and trip the strings that bind our anxious hearts
and voices follow us in our footfalls
that lead to soulful, raw, uncertain starts.
The morrow feels as if it's far away,
though darkness boldly climbs along my spine
our things all packed to move without delay,
the things we often touched and declared "mine"...
...but what was "mine" was here within this place;
unseen, untouched, unknown to any hands
as smiling comfort smoothing each small face
that now, in leaving, can not understand
that working hard won't always be enough
to keep your dreams conditioned and alive
and even things more valuable than stuff
can't always make transitions and survive...
These lessons I don't want to teach or learn,
this ache I wonder if I can endure
with hollow smiles that can't defeat the burn
of fear that comes from being so unsure
of how much worth a callous or dream
can really have in monetary schemes.
A contest entry
- Rhyme and Flow part 10 Goodbye - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
10000 points, ended September 21, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent Write
This is like the heart of a sad little short story.
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I love "sonnet pluses" and this is very well worked, very well.
We have seen far too few entries from you, one of the best rhymers and flowers on site so this in our "final" round is very welcome
Sue and I both want to thank you for your participation in this contest and the series of challenges we have run. There will be new contests coming, so please watch out for them.
All the best and thanks again,
Jeff and Sue
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Nice scan & rhyme scheme. I think you are right, you can work as hard as you can at something & it still doesn't turn out as what you wanted!
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