Ole Father in Heaven,
the worries of each day surrounds us.
conflicts both within and without
threaten the peace that we so deseparately want,
so deseparately seek,
so desparately need.
Ole Father in Heaven,
we come to you with an open heart
seeking your guidance
and wisdom in all things.
Ole Father in Heaven,
please guard our hearts
so that we may be forever faithful to you.
Let the peace of your presence surround us
each and every day
of our lives.
Author notes
Was reading a prayer which is where I got a lot of the idea for this... I have never tried to write a religious poem before. Not real sure it's finished. Personally, I think it needs more)
This is option #1 Cry out to God
In a list
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A contest entry
- Let's Talk About Heaven by Poesing.
600 points, ended September 10, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Thank you for your entry.
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thsi wasn't quite what I was looking for, but it was very nice. You're right, it doesen't seem finished some how. Oh well, thanks for entering my contest!
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Wonderful
Another well expressed poem. So very well done. And very appropriate for the contest. Best of luck in the challenge.
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Well, you made me think.
Never thought about God being old before - but I guess He is! We are surrounded by conflicts - and I hope we'll all be faithful to Him Who is so faithful to us.
I like your prayer - however, I was looking more for "heavenly" things, and how we imagine heaven itself to be. Perhaps I should have been more clear in my contest. Thank you for entering. God bless.
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Well Done
This is a great take on the photo, it has a smooth rthym and flow and speaks to the reader. You have put a lot of emotion into this, great job, John
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Are you finished with this, or not? I will give you a chance to answer before I comment on your poem prayer.
Blessings. -
i love the repetition
great job
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I really like this. If you feel it's niot finished then it's not
This is your poem and if you haven't finished saying what is in your heart, then conetinue my dear
It is certainly a heartfelt plea.
Gaylene
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Great start.. It really captures the pictures intake
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