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Ripple Effect

Stones skipping
        create
  small ripples
    in a stream,
innuendo, conjecture,
      whispers of indiscretions,
    much larger rifts that
              displace
    the ebb and flow.
        A momentary lapse
            in judgment
      creates its own path
of destruction.






Author notes

Original prompt: Spiral
Thanks to several comments I have replaced the original title, sometimes the title is like an afterthought and I am just blank. This seems to encompass the poems theme. Inspired by being 200 miles from a major storm, even there the effects are not inconsequential.

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    September 27, 2008
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    a very nice entry here, thanks


    al


  • trekkergirl
    September 25, 2008

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    I like the way the title fits in so well with the poem. I love your imagery. And how you tell a tale with your words. Great job


  • Cat gold member
    September 24, 2008

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    the rippled effect is a good title for the piece-
    there is no action without a reaction
    somewhere something changes, alters,
    becomes something we
    did or did not expect- even if the
    change occurs only inside us

    nicely done- thanks for entering

    m


  • mcw120588
    September 19, 2008

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    I love the way its structured, it really adds to the words and gives a visual to the already perfect images that your words express. excellent


  • quantumsurveyor
    September 16, 2008

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    I am fed up of finding that your poems demand loud applause and nice words. Don't stop. This is a jolly piece of philosophy (I hope that's the right word) and a lovely twist (hehe) on the truth of stones in water.


  • HpWICKEDangel
    September 15, 2008

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    yes, the title fits the theme of the piece. i love how it just flows and you actually see the ripple. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.


  • Grunts Girl
    September 11, 2008
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    I liked this and how you twisted it visually down the page

  • Suzanne Dia
    September 10, 2008
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    I love the twist on the ripple, actually.
    I had a moment of concern that I was going to read the same rewritten proverb that I've read a thousand times, but you twisted it into something else...

    and it's true
    it's consequence

    wonderful use of the prompt

    good luck




  • zochit2me gold member
    September 9, 2008

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    Wow
    Great use of the prompt...
    I am not crazy about the title but the contents under it are awesome! Like a spiral downward or a ripple effect. One moments judgement can make a world of difference in a life.

    ♥Becky♥

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