I want to move you,
Make you feel love in the deepest parts,
To touch and taste you,
I want to hold your heart.
I want to believe in you,
To live in you.
Surrounding your being with the things we are seeing,
Ourselves, as one.
I want to trust in you.
Grow with you.
Feel joy and pain and forever remain
With you.
I long for you.
To meet you, to see you
To hear you need me too.
To be the one who'll fight someone,
To protect my honour too.
We will be entwined in eternity...
I just need you to find me.
Author notes
I wanted to see if I could discover true love.
This is what I ended up with.
In a list
A contest entry
- Silly love songs by ml12.
550 points, ended November 15, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Does this convey true love?
Comments
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I don't know if what you found was true love or longing but I really enjoyed it. The premise was simple but sweet and you didn't over do it with rubbish metaphors. Cheers
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This sounds like your wedding vow, you will have to save it for that moment. I love this, heart rendering and genuine.
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ummm very very loving and i would of believed that you've been in love...seriously!!
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bravo
this does indeed convey true love... or at least what i know of it. and im so glad you could share it with me.
this poem... aaah i just really like it.
very good job.
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