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Runaway



Gasping for my breath,
glow of red upon my face,
my stomach feels so hollow,
in natures vibrant place.

Succulent fruits abound,
in the colors of a rainbow,
I grin in all the pleasures,
as I rest upon my elbow.

Hair soaked with sweat,
as charlie flies overhead,
the shadows of chocolate brown,
lay all around me like a bed.

So deep into exhaustion,
come the dreams of mothers milk,
as it eases my parched throat,
and slips away like loving silk.




Author notes

Word Bank #1 - words used breath-red-hollow-vibrant-succulent-rainbow- grin-hair-charlie-chocolate-deep-milk-throat. did not use hari as i have no definition for this word.

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  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 28, 2008

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    wow this is outstanding.. You did an excellent job with the word bank..

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Reptile Lady gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    A fantastic poem hun
    Nicely flowing and the last stanza to me spoke of wishing to be that babe back in his mothers arms.
    Maybe I am wrong !
    Best wishes in the contest and great word back
    Julie


  • penman gold member
    September 11, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Excellent use of word bank. So very well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    Nicely excecuted. I think that the you have done a great job with the word bank. Option 1 seems to be the most popular.

    Mike