Who's in control
It's sure not me
I continue to fall
Failing... m
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r
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b
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y
I'm still on my own
Doing my own thing
Without any help
Pain and clipped...w
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g
s
God hear me, help me
I can't do this on my own
Author notes
Prompt:
I can't escape this hell
So many times i've tried
But i'm still caged inside
Somebody get me through this nightmare
I can't control myself
Dont forget to credit:
Three Days Grace
Animal I Have Become
A contest entry
- Quickie by Lil-Bit Crazy.
600 points, ended September 8, 2008, 7 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Who indeed is in charge?
Comments
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i really like this... great way to express your words too... thanks for entering this contest and best of luck.....
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Thanks much for the bronze win. Hard for me to write a short one lol. Ya know how long winded I can be.
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Nicely done. I think this is great. You have put together a great poem based on the prompt.
Mike
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The wavering line of letters making up "miserably" makes for a very intense effect, but less so for "wings".
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I agree with your comments on the 'wings' I tried to get it to go up and down as if flapping but just couldn't get it to it when I typed it several different ways.
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Ooo... I like this.
I wish you all the best in the contest.
Rose -
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Thanks so much for the encouragement.
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Thanks much for the comments and encouragment, Rose.
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