your tongue found its way
down my throat,
licking the vocal chords -
and I cough,
but your strawberry bubble gum flavor
stays stuck
inside the cracks of my innards;
trying to digest your words
that tickle my belly...
[cried out of
desperation:
never thought I'd get
so choked up
over you.]
the air I breathe tastes like
your carbon-based,
garden-variety,
boy.
tried to raise you from scratch -
coaxed my hands to stop flooding you
with who I wanted you to be;
oh, your presence still walks through
dreams of your
our
harvest...
next time
[if there is one],
I'll chew and swallow
without speaking.
~~~
Author notes
this started off as a write based just about food, but then it turned personal. based off of a past relationship that lasted about two weeks.
I get too attached to some people.
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Comments
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This is quite a poem here thank you for entering will return to this fine gem to enjoy it more
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Wow
Thats amazing....Im hard to please too.
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Lol.
I really hope this isn't about who I think it is, but still a pretty amazing poem. Perhaps a more conservative Parker would find this poem a little explicit, but I'm content with the 500 cock jokes I've already thought of about this poem.
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Like I said, it started off as just another random poem, but then turned personal. No nasty jokes are needed. Not a metaphor for that.
It's pretty obvious who it is, but hey, past memories & feelings make for good writings, don't you think?
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Very interesting. I see the deeper layers.
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I rather liked this - it made me smile despite the serious content. Could have been worse - no strawberry bubble gum - just hot chillies/curry powder!
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true!
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quite sad here and the form really adds to the poem. I like your creativity here.
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Oh wow, Cassie! This is amazing! Seriously, I love it. One of your best, I think.
Sorry I'm short of words tonight, if you ever want more later then you know where to find me
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Thank you so much.
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oh i love this, but idk..i thought i saw an error somewhere...*shrugs*
but i love this, its delictable...and i wanted to eat it, lol *Hugs*
glad ou entered, enter again
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error? O.O where?
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tried to raise your from scratch -
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yes.
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okay, all better, now write again
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eeps, I'll have to think about it for a while.
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ready set think!
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but it hurts.
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well you can do another oen tommorow then
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okay.
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woohooo,
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