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~~~ZZZzzzzzzTTttttt~~~ (Electric Vow)

Missing image
passions dance in text among
alphabets and numbers strung
        across a visual banner;

a few pauses by ellipses ...
silent emotion cravings these
dots and gem-like cues
t’s crossed, and dotted i’s
question marks less loved than
soulful exclamations in ariel font.

a hundred extra bytes will spare
faces through electric air
      loomed smiles in custom shades;

telephone voices then complete
this love affair pixel- sweet
save for hugs and kisses, skin and smell
post scripted, accomodated
by sending scratch n’sniff samples
in a stamped and perfumed evelope.

Author notes

Inspired by those involved with internet-rooted love affairs
that can't be poetically expressed

Do... be careful.

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  • myrataal silver member
    September 10, 2008

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    Oh My!

    You wrote this so acutely and painfully correct! I shudder when I think of my children surfing this Net!

    I sent Lute a link today of a poetry collection I wrote, inspired by his poems ... It made me blush! I often fall in love with souls. I simply cannot help it. I am much like Tristan and Isolde. However, I am very much a one-man-woman for a one-woman-man ...

    Aren't we all?

    Love
    Myra


  • donnz
    September 8, 2008
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    Well Articulated


  • suseann
    September 8, 2008

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    Awh yes, the liars club of virtual misfortune.I know of a couple of coul/,no indiviguals. Who married via virtual romance. But both are headed to court.Funny piece.


  • tomisb
    September 8, 2008

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    A sharp clever statement on the current definition of virtual: better than real. Unfortunately the old definition is stil the truth: almost but not quite real. Everything done by those on line in these virtual relationships is and effort to maintain the lie at all costs when the true keeps eroding away all the bull and shinning through. Enjoyed your impactful piece.
    Peace & Light,
    Tom B.


  • just mercedes gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Ah! Too clever by far!

    Most impressive - 'pixel sweet'

    runner up - 'scratch'n'sniff samples'


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 7, 2008

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    Hmmm.... I definitely liked it, but I can't decide whether I liked it. I say that because it was such an excellent poem, but it reduced love to not but a penny toy. But, it was a great write.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Clovis...Curious silver member
    September 7, 2008

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    Excellent

    Ah, a very cool right, indeed. You expressed yourself quite well. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.

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