pearl back shards
and shafts of skin -
out of body
needs an experience.
teeth grind your
heartbeats down to
tumbling china bits and
pieces that slide
like hummingbirds
below.
muscles and eyes
have minds and
tiny wings attached
that make your bones itch
and beat everything
you write
down to unfamiliar dust.
there is
no other way to reach
the ghost of a still-alive
kernel of you hammering
underneath it all
except by sending out
radio signals of nothing
through the land
of the dead.
Author notes
This is a rewrite of a poem by righteousme, which can be found here: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4527049
A contest entry
- How About You Do Better .... (maybe not such a quickie...) by righteousme.
1050 points, ended September 8, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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WOW !!! ok . favorite parts of this piece are as follows : teeth grind your
heartbeats down to
tumbling china bits and
pieces that slide
like hummingbirds
below. ... : i am like OMG does this person know me??
muscles and eyes
have minds and
tiny wings attached
that make your bones itch
and beat everything
you write
down to unfamiliar dust. ... : real life i say that a lot , that my bones twitch and itch and stillness is such a hard thing ...
wow!!! i am impressed and i do feel that this was more than i imagined to get!!!
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Well, thank you for running the contest and providing such inspiring poems to work from ^^
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