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morning star.

stars burst in displays of red and blue
creating pinwheels of soft smiles
and flashy hearts.

it was at the time of the eclipse
when the sun and stars were both lit up
under one night sky.

if our lives were an eclipse you’d be my sun
and she would be your star.

and until the day came when we would sleep during the day
we would never be in love;
because who sees stars in the morning?

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  • aanika
    September 15, 2008

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    hahahah I remember you trying to write this
    and using 'star' like eight times
    but I love this
    and CONGRATS ON THE BRONZE.


  • offlimits
    September 14, 2008
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    i loved this poem it was really good and sooo sweet
    good luck in the contest


  • Note The Sarcasm
    September 10, 2008

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    This was cool. It reminded me of the Twilight series. Maybe because I just started Breaking Dawn, or something. I dunno. Great write, though!


  • Rizzie
    September 7, 2008
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    oh wow
    such a pretty poem and great takeon the prompt!
    wonderful luckon thecontest!

  • Rizzie
    September 7, 2008
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    your title is 'Morning Star'

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