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Anaesthesia

It's time to hit the bottle,
and drink away my tears.
I have to dream of tomorrow,
because there's no today.

When there's no way out,
and no way up,
my only choice is down,
until the glass is empty.

It may sound sad to you,
because it damn well does to me,
that the bar man's my best friend,
as long as he keeps the whiskey coming.

Some day soon I'll be crying,
vodka tainted tears.
I can't drink away the problems,
liqour's just an anaesthetic,
when I need to dull the storm.

 

This ride can't go on forever,

one day I'll have to hit the breaks,

until then,

you'll find me at the bar. 

 

 

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I'll give you my blood if that's all you need

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  • annesall235
    November 30, 2008

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    Good job with the word choice and the form, very clean and neat i love the fact that it is so close to life verses some of the poems that are just words filling space


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 18, 2008

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    Yeah, you capture it well, nice to see the sickness being acknowledged. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.


    whisper

  • Hidden Depths
    September 19, 2008

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    I could relate to this poem. To me, this poem showed the weariness of resigning to one's current "drinking problem, but I'd like to see you infuse a little more of the emotional roller coaster involved in the life of someone who is "drinking their problems away". I've been here a time or two in my past and I know exactly what it is that you're trying to communicate, but some people don't. Anyway, you did a good job and my favorite line was:

    "Some day soon I'll be crying,
    vodka tainted tears."

    Thanks!


  • SoxxDisastrous
    September 15, 2008

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    Hmm. This is an interesting piece. It’s very strong, very powerful. I like it. The line, “Some day soon I'll be crying,
    vodka tainted tears.” is my favorite. Nice job on this, your work is impressive.


  • Charlotte Whispers
    September 11, 2008

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    This is a very haunting piece, partly because it feels very real to me -- even if you haven't gone through this yourself, it feels very haunted and dejected. I have friends who are in recovery from some addictions and I gotta say, that's the kind of attitude the seemed to have -- devil may care, I know that this is bad but I don't much give two flying donkey shits. I gotta say that this is a very well-written piece.


  • chasing rainbows
    September 7, 2008
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    Wow, this is harrowing. Very well written.

    Peace & love,
    xx Sin

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