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I came to you in need
You followed me with lies
A gravity compressing with no compromise
A silence as heavy as all the steel you could mill
You could put it in your gun,
Or chasis it on wheels.
I have for you something,
but it is a secret.
I have for you something,
you will never deserve.
A perfect attraction,
and I'll let you keep it.
A glass crackling symphony
Of garulous verve.
When I'm done, you can kiss my ass
As you make those Indians move
I'll be your future shadow's past
& bring the devil's sassiest groove.
And in fact if my memory serves me right
Which it always does
You were not much to remember
Now that magnets buzz.
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Written January 19th, 2004
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I listened.And read.Nice work.~~~Suseann
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nice work sir
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did you listen to it?
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did you click on the link and listen to it?
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i adore great job on this one horus... loved eery line it brought me completely in..
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excellent
yeah liars are real pigs -
When I'm done, you can kiss my ass
As you make those Indians move
I'll be your future shadow's past
& bring the devil's sassiest groove.
the whole last stanza brought a smile to my face. and i probably didnt even understand it..but i like it anyways.
Blu -
that's because it's a song, you're supposed to click the link and listen to it.
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It's a song, you're supposed to listen to it.
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This is a beautiful poem that comes with a unique flow in the lyrics on listening to a secret.I love the presentation,it is so unique and relevant to the message.Like wise the pattern, sextet on the first stanza and octave on the second and third stanzas.BEAUTIFUL!
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This started off well and i was very impressed with the flow and the message. Then the ending kinda fell flat for me. I am sorry about this, but I think you could make the ending as good as the rest of this great piece.
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makes me wonder
ah ew got me on that ending.makes me wonder what your doing when you said, When Im done, you can kiss my ass? the peom had a good flow to it then a dead stop ending. -
You can't even spell consistant you ass-hat.
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hmmmm in all honesty i cant say whether or not i like this. However i will say that the flow in thie piece if good and consitant keep up the good work
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This is a very powerful write. I wish I could listen, but the speakers aren't working. Good job!
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I loved this...I wonder was the guitar using a distorted chorus pedal. I love that sound. This reminds me of another band but I can't remember the damn name. Musta been Horus8 & the werewolves..lol...cool tune
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make and ass of you know more...
like a buzz of vibrating panties
the batteries always go dead
in the heat of moments....
lol
i liked this alot! -
My that guy says alot.
I've never known magnets to buzz, repell, or attract, but not buzz, but perhaps im just not listening well enough.
*claps* nice nice...you are... surreal.
Nyx... -
Sheer Beauty
U R GENUS
Yeah, that sorta slipped out while I was dancing to the devil's sassiest groove (terrific line by the way) and just generally boogaloogying to the Satin Satan Trio here on the radio. KHEL - 100,000 watts of pure hellish power straight into your SOUL! Wear tinfoil, earplugs and duct tape and it'll still find you and kick your feet out in an impish jig. Best reserved for those succubus Saturday nights when you're feeling like you've been had, squeezed and drained - then tossed into a corner, quivering like some organic gelatin heap of protoplasm.
This has some awesome imagery - "gravity compressing with no compromise", "A silence as heavy as all of the steel", and "A glass crackling symphonyOf garulous verve." There's more, of course, but I'm limiting myself to a mere trio of essential distillations tonight.
I think I've run into her ... and if it was after you, you didn't have anything to slow her down with (and neither did I, but I tried before succumbing like a banana to a steamroller). And in the end, you're oh, so right. How do you do that?
I'm flabbergasted, flustered and freeze-dried. I'll take a dozen in assorted colors.
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Good write, it had a nice flow to it. Nice job.
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I liked this very much! I am still trying to learn the devils sassiest groove! magnets attract, or is that suck.. Not too sure. I know a person like the one you mentioned.. ate my soul like a casserole.. It all seems to happen when you confide in someone and treat them like a human being that the cast about for a reason to seperate themselves from you after you have gived a great deal..
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great write but where are the cross-eyed children at
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