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You Complete Me

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I'm sittin' here, watchin' you sleep,
knowin' you filled some place deep ~
I believe this love is real,
can't explain, it's what I feel...

As you rest so peacefully
I think of tomorrow, what I hope to see ~
Beloved, you are here with me
and I'm as happy as a man can be...

When I looked in your eyes,
my love, that is when I knew
that the hole in my heart
would forever be filled by you

Completely~
you complete me

Driving here was worth every mile ~
I'd do it again just to see you smile...

With you, my love, I'm satisfied!
Love's desires won't be denied

Deep inside there was a place
that felt so empty, this hallow space...
Then you came into my life ~
so happy, that day I made you my wife...

When I looked in your eyes,
my love, that is when i knew
that the hole in my heart
would forever be filled by you...
My beautiful bride,
your love is so fresh and new...
No more hole in heart ~
it's been filled by love from you

Completely
you complete me

completely
you complete me...

 

Author notes

prompt: extreme "hole hearted"
image credit: http://farm1.static.flickr.com/58/214369359_0c0d31454d.jpg

these are original lyrics written to the melody of "hole hearted," by extreme
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_69WxDsTSO8

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  • Nicada silver member
    December 1, 2008

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    Wow! This is so beautiful and romantic. I can't imagine any woman who would not want to hear these words from her loved one. Nice job on this write and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • cbsbecm88
    November 28, 2008
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    i was judging and realized i forgot to give you a total score! sorry!

    total-47.5 great job!


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    November 12, 2008
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    so well done all it needs is some music
    beautifully written
    God bless you my friend...


    • Xianaria gold member
      November 12, 2008
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      Thank you ~
      It actually fits over the Extreme song "Hole Hearted"

  • cbsbecm88
    November 9, 2008

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    beautiful!!!!

    Title-9.5 great title for the poem! the whole in the heart was filled completely and so you complete me is the perfect title!

    Flow-9.5 amazing flow and rhyming that change throughout the poem to give it uniqueness!

    Rules-10 from what i could see you followed the rules just fine!

    Creativity-9.5 granted i only have 4 entries so far you are still one of my favorites that i have ever judged! this poem was so beautiful!

    Song-9 i have never heard this song before but listened to it and thought you did a good rewording the chorus!

    wonderful job and good luck!


  • Manoj Sanyal
    October 16, 2008
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    very good poem...
    Good luck,


  • Samantha Marie
    September 21, 2008
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    this is very beautiful
    thanks for entering good luck


  • Riftkin gold member
    September 15, 2008

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    This is a beautiful thoughtful poem. I love the feeling that came from the words as they flowed down the page. The love that one can complete the other and make both whole.

    Thank you for entering.

    Riftkin

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