If you light yourself a candle
A story to you it will tell
A story old - not ever new
A story you know well
The flame will waiver gently
Soaring high or drifting low
Its movement starts to vary
As the air beings to flow
Upward reaches out the flame
Depicting the highs in your life
Ebbing every now and again
Depicting occasional strife
The candle flames your yesterdays
Reminisce what you've been dealt
Memories there to live again
As you watch that candle melt
For those times you feel unhappy
For the times you heave a sigh
Sit down and light that candle
Reminisce when the flame is high
Mr. Doug
A contest entry
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Beautiful flow and also your rhyming was awesome!
"Upward reaches out the flame
Depicting the highs in your life
Ebbing every now and again
Depicting occasional strife"
Great job! Goodluck and thanks for entering my contest.
-heva
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wow, really really well articulated, i fact one of the reasons i started this contest, thank you for entering and ill look at this again
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Excellent
This is an excellent message in fine poetry.
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GREAT job here, the rhyme and flow were right on, and I really like the subject you chose. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Beautiful imagery in this wonderfully written poem. I really enjoyed this one! I especially liked this stanza:
Upward reaches out the flame
Depicting the highs in your life
Ebbing every now and again
Depicting occasional strife
Good luck in the contest! -
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Paloszoo
Thank you for your kind comments on my poem "Candle".
My very best to you and yours
Mr. Doug
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