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Southern Land September


 The day is grey

 still a magpie sings

 Perched on a bare

 budding bough

 Of intending spring

 

 The seeming naked earth

 awakening from sleeping

 As bulging bulbs

 send forth their shafts and leaves

 In known and upright dignity

 

 Anticipated flower

 so near so far

 Yet birth and death now embraced

 within the embryo of nurturing

 Created and creating

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  • penman gold member
    October 30, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Very creative and so well done. Thank you for sharing.


  • jackreed3 gold member
    October 11, 2008

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    This Poem is Great... the flow was awsome... a perfect poem for a understanding lovers mind...
    Your friend in Poetry... JackReed3...


  • Sandygram silver member
    October 2, 2008

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    So Beautiful

    You have captured the beauty and wonder of Fall in your lovely words. It is my favorite time of the year so I truly enjoyed your poem. Take care.

    Sandy


  • chilali
    September 28, 2008

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    Wow. This entire poem was just lovely and very simple which is great. I really liked the second stanza the most. True beauty in your words dear poet! Keep writing Looking forward to more of your magical works

  • Bob Fox
    September 26, 2008

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    Nature

    Nature so defined as only a poet could do. And life and death are a must to be part of natures beauty. Write on dear poet.


  • Beret55 silver member
    September 22, 2008

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    Spring is my fav time of year.
    "The seeming naked earth awakening from sleeping"
    I liked that..


  • Puppydog gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    BEAUTIFUL!!!!

    I for one love the change of the seasons. It is the change that shows just how beautiful this world can be all year long.


  • rbruce gold member
    September 19, 2008

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    Winter has now left and our magpies sing on bare budding boughs every day, grey or sunny. I can relate to this poem thoroughly. Thank you or sharing your thoughts.


  • Papabear 4 Rosered
    September 17, 2008

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    Optimistic

    You have a way of looking at a dark sad thing and finding good things. I hope your optimism serves you well.


  • Saffron gold member
    September 14, 2008

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    This is the second poem I have read in the contest that speaks of spring in September, which is refreshing. I liked the imagery of renewal in this poem, which is something that I have always associated September with (rather than at the beginning of a new year).

    Thank you so much for entering this contest, and welcome to this poetry site

    Saffron


  • Bosiarbooger gold member
    September 11, 2008

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    wonderful

    I felt myself whispering while reading I'm not sure who I would be disturbing ,but the piece made me feel that way. And if you made me feel you did your job. Welcome to AP I am sure I'll be reading you a lot in the future. Best of luck, Boog


    • Jesann gold member
      September 12, 2008
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      Thanks for dropping by and for your comments.


  • Simbelmyne
    September 10, 2008

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    I really like the word choice in this piece! The rhythm and soft use of rhyme is well-crafted. Definitely something I'd love to read again! Will be bookmarking this one. I think the first stanza might be my favorite--it's such a wonderful beginning!

    Write/Rock/Love/Live On, Sim


    • Jesann gold member
      September 10, 2008
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      Thank you for commenting,greatly appreciated.

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