All I ever wanted to be was wanted
accepted for who
and what I am.
For someone to look at me
and see
who I truly am.
Not what they wanted me
to be.
All I ever wanted to be
was loved.
To be touched with gentleness
and kindness.
For passion to ignite
into a burning flame
til two lovers become one.
All I ever wanted to be
was the girl inside
not the one outside looking in.
All I ever wanted
was to be...
Author notes
hope you like this. AP name is trekkergirl original prompt is all my life I wanted to be. I am the almighty enigma. Fear me.
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A contest entry
- All my life I wanted to be... by Cannonsfire.
2720 points, ended September 24, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Brothers and Sisters... AP Family one and All by Poetryistherapy.
770 points, ended September 25, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Contest for free verse poems... PW of Sept'08 allowed by Manoj Sanyal.
370 points, ended September 15, 2008, 24 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into gold (or silver or bronze) #6 by whispernthedark.
700 points, ended September 27, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes by Flowergirl.
750 points, ended September 28, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hah. Like I'm really gonna have one. by backdrop.silhouette.
1000 points, ended September 28, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Best of AP by ageofdarkpoets.
450 points, ended October 6, 2008, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Here's Your Chance to Get that Trophy You Deserved! by TabbyCat.
1200 points, ended October 29, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - FOR MY FAMILY , FRIENDS! AND EVERYONE ELSE---COME ENTER PW--PW--PW--ENTER . GOLD gets 1,000 points by echo-ink.
1450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 17 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Who are you... Really? by Second Dance Reborn.
1050 points, ended November 10, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - CELEBRATING POETRY AND POETS- ONE-DAY competition, "PREVIOUSLY WRITTEN" WORK ONLY by Vera Rich.
6000 points, ended November 26, 2008, 127 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - all the prewrites you want (theres a catch) by serenity silvermoon.
400 points, ended January 7, 299 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best of Gold. by morgana raven.
400 points, ended February 9, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - INVITE-SHOW ME WHAT YOU'VE GOT!!! by Heroesrox.
1200 points, ended February 16, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make this THE largest Contest EVER on AP [enter, enter, enter!] by Symphony.
18000 points, ended April 28, 1014 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling all gold and silver prize poems.. (Round 1) by xXGoddessofPainXx.
400 points, ended April 23, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I think it's awesome piece.. I really do love it and at times I really feel all the things you have written about.. Congrats see you in round 2
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Awesome job with this one my friend!
Congratulations to you on all of your trophies here and good luck to you in the rest!
Jeremy0826 -
Congratulations on the trophies that this one has won for you; they are deserved - one part particularly hit me, and it was,
"All I ever wanted to be
was loved."
because that's a basic human need, or want - isn't it? Life without love would be very dark indeed, and yet -
you didn't write this with bitterness, but more a sense of longing and nostalgia for all that could have been ...
thanks for sharing it with us
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WOW! You got the trophies on this one, trekkergirl! Uhura would be so proud! (JK!) Thanks so much for a briliant write and good luck in my contest!
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thanks for commenting. Yeah I have entered this into several contests but that is because it is one of my favorites.
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for starters the fact that this has been entered in SO many contests is a huge turn off for me. but luckily that's not gonna sway my judgement.
the idea of this is pretty good. because we all want to be accepted for we are and in turn accept other people.
in the first stanza, i believe there should maybe be a comma after wanted.
i think there could be more depth added to this and lot more imagery. right now, it seems like ideas for stanzas.
it's kinda straight forward, we have all been there but you haven't showed in what way, if that makes sense.
thanx for entering.
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dani -
I really liked the theme of this poem, it could have perhaps been a little longer but other than that I thought it was really good. Well worded and nice emotion.
Thanks for entering.
Laura -
This is a sad and emotion filled poem, and one that many probably can relate to at different times in their lives. We all just want to be loved unconditionally just for who we are. Great job on this write and congratulations on the well earned trophies. Blessings, Patty
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An interesting piece... But this was a competition for poems celebrating poets and or poetry.
I thought when I read it that it was leading up to the ending "All my life I wanted to be a poet" - but alas it does not. And without such a climax - or alternatively some allusion in the title to the desire to be a poet, it does seem rather too peripheral.
By the way, I realize you entered the competition in some haste; however, do remember it is always advisable with a "previously written" piece to have a quick look to see if your "Author's Notes" box contains any material specific to a previous competition - and if so, to delete it. -
Sad and thoughtful poetry, well worded and nicely constructed.
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Very soul crushingly sad, but it sings with so much of your own thoughts. I cannot say anything beyond what has already been said except I love your poem and you have my best wishes.
Sincerely,
Dragon of the West -
This is truly sad, but amazingly written
I liked it very much -
so sad!
this was so sad and touching...its a picture that has touched me deeply..thanks for sharing such poem with us! welldone!
juliet
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The edning is strong. You've taken the promt and made it an intregal part of your poem. You've given it more power with your poem. Nicely done.
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Awwwwww This was so sad, yet wonderful and powerful,
I loved it.
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this peice was really good, it really moved me probably cause i myself feels left out of the crowd but than again everyone feels left out every once in a while. thanks for sharing this i hope to see more
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This is another very good poem. You write directly from the heart, probably in a moment of pure emotion, and it trasnlates well. Yours are poems that can be read by almost anyone and the feeling portrayed is the same. If you need someone to talk to, I'm always willing to listen.
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very sad write but beautiful i loved it....thank yu for your entry....
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Sad
We all wish to find someone that will see the real us, but remember that you have to show that for someone to see it. If you do not let them in they will not see. Then again if you let them in and they don't really pay attention you can be hurt. It's a delicate ballence. I hope you find you equal so that your life can be ballanced, The Shaker
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I really love this honey, it speaks straight to the soul. Great write, thank you for entering the contest. Good luck.
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whisper
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Hi
I can see why this one won a cup. It's a well penned reflective piece. It's really what everybody wants, that universal 'love me for myself' thing. Great write!
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Perhaps that's all any of us want. You are able to put it into words that work very well. I really like the ending.
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Sweet, gentle, thoughtful and real. So well expressed.
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Very powerful and emotional write. Perfect ending.
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emotional yet personal opinion here "and kindness" isn't necessary. the repetition of "to be" not sure if it was deliberate but il assume it was and its ingenious to the essence of this write. the idea of being is pervasive and depicted clearly. id just ask if "being" depends on the love of another or the love of thyself? the old maxim: first you must love thyself. just a thought perhaps not related to the poem but worth thinking about. either way this is well done good work
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Strong words and splendid emotions, such a wonderful write! Keep penning!
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Wonderful
Very powerful and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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Painful
Your poem is full of emotions wanting to be loved. That is what most of us want in life although it does not always come easy for many. You deserve a trophy for this poem well written.
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I will have to dq this if its not fixed in 3 days....
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This happens to be my pre-write and you didn't put anything down for pre-writes. For my freshwrite I did add the color, AP name, and name of poem that I used. What needs to be fixed if I might ask. I'll gladly fix it but I am not aware of what needs fixed. My freshwrite happens to be the poem "Enough"
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Wow This is a really good poem!! You express everything you want to say! You express everything you feel!! Its amazing!!!!
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It is a good poem ... a bit sad and emotion filled with truthfulness.
Best wishes and good luck,
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Please reread my rules so I can judge this properly!
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i don't know what other people say about this poem...but as a reader i can feel the pain within your words that erupting straight from the soulful heart...
my favorite lines:
"All I ever wanted to be
was loved.
To be touched with gentleness
and kindness."
take care...
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thank you for the wonderful words on my poem. I really appreciate them.
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... this is simple ... its beauty is elusive until the final line ... elusive, in that it drove me through me through this almost inane pretty poem, but the elusivity drove me on for I knew this was not simple, nor pretty but beautiful and powerful ... you have a titanic heart ... i don't say that to very many people
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Thaks Moqui it's always wonderful to hear from you! I haven't seen you writing much! Or have I ran you out of poems that I need to read of yours?
Love your writings as well
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Lovely and Heartfelt!!!!!!!
You have pennned a lovely poem. I can relate so well to the heartfelt words. You take care.
Bless You,
Sandy
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thanks for your comments. I am glad that you like this poem. I wasn't sure that anyone would like it. Thanks for taking the time out to comment. Means a lot to me.
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Oh I do love the way you finished this. It's really excellent, like the reader can continue this themselves and put in their own feelings.
I can so realte to this myself. Excellent, heartfelt piece here.
All the best with it
Gaylene
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thanks for commenting. I really appreciate it. I was so sure that this poem wasn't any good.
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This is by a girl who definitely IS. I loved it.
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well yeah I am a girl. And yeah I wrote it. Glad you like it.
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that's a wow picture!
and the poem...honest and has a simplicity that tugs at all the jaded parts of me
did you take that picture? awesome !
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I found the picture on the internet. I don't know who took it but when I saw it I said wow this is the picture I want for that poem. I think it goes well too.
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Very nicely done, even the repetitions in this work well.
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yeah I wasn't sure tho. Thanks for commenting. I am never confidant about my writings. For some reason I have to have others tell me if I write something good. It's rare that I am sure what I write is good. So I thank you for telling me you like this poem. I appreciate it.
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