Concrete Pathways
I want to walk
where city streets
become weightless:
The King Fisher’s darting call
erases penthouse possessions
and valueless dreams.
Sidewalks
that had seemed littered with gold
and red light districts
float on by
slowly.
Such is the way
of autumn currency,
replaying memories,
reflections of pristine skies,
traces along the bank
in the reeds
where we once bathed;
if only
I could have foreseen
the permanence
of concrete pathways
or the price of goodbye.
Author notes
if your page was not such a mess I might be able to find the theme
I once saw something that said "early autumn" or such.
A contest entry
- - Backgrounds & Borders of the Week - by Bear - Pink - Joyce & LV Angel - by Arkbear.
1034 points, ended September 14, 2008, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Really love this Autumn design, such beautiful colours and textures and I like the repeated vase form too.
Good luck.
~Titia~
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This is a very beautiful background. I must say it is very different to what the other entrants have entered. I really thought this was very nicely done, I love the textures on this piece they very and it is very will done. You did very very well with the requested prompt.
your choice of colours is very unique and definitely original.
Creativity~ 19.7
Blending~ 18.7
Colours~ 19.8
Originality~ 19.7
Seamless/Neatness~ 19.5
Lost Vampyre Angels score: 97.4
Great work
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This is so....Autumn! The winds, the muted colors slipping into gray. Great job!!
BLESSINGS & LOVE,
Doris
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Hi Ken,
Kudos for you AN
I am assuming that you digitally painted/ manipulated this image, which impresses me a lot. The palette you employed is beautiful. I also like the canvas texture, which furthers the painterly feel. This invokes a feeling of an early fall night. very strongly. The vase overlay, though skilled, takes away a bit from this feeling.
You choice of palette is earthy and has some contrast to it, but not extreme. The colors are in the middle to dark range, which will work with light type.
The major font color choice is a little too "white". fot this earthy palette. The slight earthy yellow, though a tiny bit less legible works so much better for me. The mint green I find to be an odd choice with such natural colors.
1. design/composition 19.4
2. originality(of concept) 20.0
3. color(compatibility) 19.2 A bit more care needed when choosing font colors.
4. execution 19.8
(effects/clarity/resolution/seamless)
5. legibility 19.6
(readability/sufficient contrast between type and background.)
TOTAL 98.0
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Ken, what a wonderful treat for my eyes, nice texture too and the colors are yummy. Best wishes to you in this contest and in all you do
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Nicely done BG and poem, the Bg is very soft and I really like the texture of it. Great poem as well. Best of luck...Scott
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This is a very creative piece, I do like the colours, especially the warmer reds at the bottom The embossed vase is an excellent idea! The texture works well with the over all effect. I can't see the seam, which is good I like the subtle tones, so pleased there aren't such strong colours here Over all for me it works quite well. The colours aren't all font friendly, the light green can hardly be seen. The poem, tho not needed is really beautiful, very well penned
Creativity ~ 19.4
Blending ~ 19.6
Colours ~ 19.3
Originality ~ 19.5
Title/Rules ~ 19.3
Total ~ 97.1 Very good
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a wonderful border good luck in the contest
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Beautiful! Love your soft coloring in this!
best wishes in the contest.
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Hey there ~
Most intriguing entry......the colours are wonderful.....the mint green font is almost too weak, but it does tie into that olive green smeared on your Background ...I think I would have brightened it up to that lovely darker grren fading into dark olive green.....just MO ~
Love the fading into the Vase.....lots of insight there on your part.....that takes talent, and this entry is full of it ~
I am glad you did not place a Border on this piec of Art.....I enjoy it the way it sits ~
As far as your poem.....wow....talk about seamless
Lovely Tone and brilliant Poetic voice happening ~
Thank you so much for entering the first B & B Contest......we hope you return again my Friend ~
Good luck and God bless,
Bear ~
Title....19.25...original and fitting ~
Colours...19.8...I enjoyed the colours...Mmmmm ~
Creativity...19.75...I think...this is my fav so far ~
Presentation...19.0...The White & Light green Font is the only weakess.....for me ~
First Impression...19.0...Not your usual Background....this took some time to decide on placing that Vase.....really nice job
~Bears Score: 96.8
First 19's all the way down
No editing after a Judge touches your work or until after contest closes ~
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Who's page are you speaking of being such a mess?
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opps, I did not think this was an anonymous contest, sorry.
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Umm....I did not either....I guess Joyce wants it anon
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No I don't, but I'm a silver member. I know most of the designers so far by their work. One I was pretty sure of, but not positive.
When I saw the poem and unique design, I knew this one was yours.
I got to go to bed. It's after 2 am. -
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ya me too it is close to 3am ugg, I am such an addict lol
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