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Closer






Now touching,

closer,

warm breaths catching

as we lean to each other -

then the friction of lips,

and the taste of ohmygod,

your tongue, my hands, your hands

and closer now,

closer.

How much of me is touching you right now?

I need a way to touch you more,

to make this kiss last

until

I am all you.





 

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  • poet girl
    December 21, 2008
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    Wow, what a moment. "I am all you" now that is close.

  • Shannon
    October 20, 2008

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    Made me think of Buffalo Bill but perhaps that's because I just read the one about making acorns out of bones.

    "how much of my body is touching you right now?"

    That seems like something someone might actually think if they were capable of forming coherent thoughts in the heat of passion. Usually I just think....well, wait. I don't remember.


  • nevadapoet
    September 8, 2008

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    A beautiful wrtite with great flow and imagery. A perfect write for the contest...thanks for the entry.
    Nevadapoet


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 6, 2008

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  • tomisb silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    You catch the intensity and the desire. Nicely down in a quick sequence of words.
    Peace & Light,
    Tom B.


  • LalalalaLoopstah gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    and the taste of ohmygod

    made me say out loud, "oh my God"....
    Fabulous!

  • Saffron gold member
    September 6, 2008
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