The church bells are ringing, this day death is bringing. For all of those who have died, thinking they were on the winner's side. A tear and my heart for the mothers and fathers who have died. Be proud of your young men and women, yes they tried. Be not ashamed of the tears you shed, always remember your loss in your heart and your head. For another people they have bled. Now being in God's hand. They removed a mad man from a foreign land...
Let's take a moment of silence, for the brave men and women of Iraq. Some have come home, some will never come back. I pray each and every night.This war is only the beginning, there is no end in sight. So I guess we must prove to all who the biggest dog is in this fight. To all those brave men and women of Iraq, this one's for you, once so many, now only a little few. God is looking down and crying, and understanding the things you have been through...
The bag pipes are playing your song, a sad and haunting sound. All my respect, I stand hand on heart, while they place the fallen six feet into the ground. For this that something has come to me, this sad and lonesome day. Intel the people in power change their lust for war, our young men and women will cross the seas, to go and stay.
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For the brave men and women of Iraq, Who will never come home. This poem I dedicate for all of you.
A contest entry
- Semi-Quickie by Enkeli.
400 points, ended September 8, 2008, 13 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I hope I can make the cut, with this one. Thanks.
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I pray for our troops every night and for World Peace. this is so beautiful and sensitive and loving it should be carved in a monument to all the soldiers that gave their lifes for all of us and to make the world a better place. Beautifully said
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WOW
I was in the middle of writing my response to this when suddenly the screen cleared and i lost it all >.<
Wanted to say one thing; WOW - this was amazing and brought tears to my eyes; i read an awful lot of poetry on here each day, yet not all move me like this one did. Truly astounding, you must have put your heart and soul into writing it!
Favourite, lines, i *think* had to be;
"The bag pipes are playing your song, a sad and haunting sound. All my respect, I stand hand on heart, while they place the fallen six feet into the ground."
And yet, it was so fantastic overall, I'm sure if I came back later, I would pick a different favourite. BRAVO!
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Inspiring
I may not be in a service that fights for our country, but I feel a deep respect for those in the Army, Marines, and Navy that put their lives on the line daily in the line of duty. This is a great tribute to those men and women, good job.
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My Heart just stopped upon reading this, I nearly lost a friend of mine when the Hummer he was in ran over an IED, it went off near him and he took a piece of metal to the face. This really really hits home
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nice write
good points
gently put shows respect for the fallen
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UMM what do I say
wow my heart like slowed down so much when I read that. So much feeling and passion in your writing. This is a great write and for anyone that has a loved one in the military probably is glad you worte it. Don't know what else to say other than BRAVO
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i like tour poem its so cool and thanks for commenting me
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Wow... this is really sweet and heartfelt. I dunno what else to say...
Thank for entering. Good luck poet.
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Enkeli -
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Hey
I just wanted to say thank you for looking at my poem. I think that this is one of my best. Thanks again for your reply.
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WOAHHH!
this is amamzing. i love it and how you wrote it. the beginning is my favorite ^-^
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WOW! this is really a deep and intense write. There's so much emotion poured into these words, I actually almost cried. There are a couple of places where your flow seems a little off:
In the first stanza: "For another people they have bleed." I think 'bleed' should be 'bled'?
In the second stanza: "there is no ending in sight" I think 'ending' should be 'end'?
Just a thought, I battled a little with the rhyming of Iraq because I pronounce it differently. But all in all a fantastic write - as usual!!!
Thanks for sharing this, and all the best to you in the contest,
Luck.
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