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The Moon's Maddening Glow (adult)

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Soaked inside Moon's maddening glow
His hands, how they love to touch me. . .
He tastes of Heaven and fire below,
I surrender my love's final question.
 
Our lips spill passion's

frenzied wine; insatiable;

intense beyond limits of

my dazzled mind.
We're incendiary enough to
blaze night time skies;
Phantoms dancing in
Moon's Sapphire eyes. . .
His combustible heat

consumes me. . .

Author notes

40-60 words
option 2, by unknown

60 words, exactly.
Sapphire my birthstone, Madame Moon, my Goddess.

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  • lunarlunacy
    October 18, 2008
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    effective. love the language in the closing stanza.


  • poppa
    September 21, 2008

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    now Im thirsting for that consumption... wonderful sensual write, soft rhythm and rhyme heighten the feast
    bravo


  • voodoo ink Greeters member
    September 9, 2008

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    Oh, sweety...I am at a loss of words for the image and your poem...you always know how to get me hot and bothered, my love ...love this, but not as much as the one who wrote it ...

  • kraazk05
    September 8, 2008

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    Definitely a celestial thing going on with you right now, eh? Love the personification of the moon in the first stanza. Excellent metaphors throughout.

    Good luck in the contest, and clappy dudes!


  • CaliOkie silver member
    September 8, 2008

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    Beautiful. Very sensual. You have such vivid imagery with a great deal of texture. Very well done.

    Good luck in the contest.

    Garrison


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    September 7, 2008

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    Wow, wonderful work with this
    picture prompt here! Very sensual
    and passionate words. Good luck to you
    with this one my friend!




    Jeremy0826


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    September 7, 2008
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    Nicely done. You have heated up the night with this one Jin.

    Mike


  • Weltt
    September 7, 2008

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    Oooooo this is very good indeed!!!
    Your flow and word choice here read off like silk.
    Sensually brilliant.
    Loved it!!!


  • moon2u
    September 7, 2008
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    very sensuous and seductive


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    this is brilliant.. I love it so very much.. I see that you've edited a bit.. excellent job with the prompt.. it's a beautiful, sensual and erotic poem.. I love it.

    good luck in the contest

    kat


  • Blue Rew silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    Poetic combustion~! This one lingers just long
    enough to entice. Potent use of imagery.
    I liked the elusiveness found here. Blue


  • The Drifter
    September 6, 2008

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    Drink deeply of the lover's wine--surcumb to the vision's touch--let burn you both up and out of the ashes will rise two mortal lovers so deeply in love with each other.
    Their love being stronger, hotter becoming the life's blood for both.
    So out of the ashes of the past, a new beginning for the two lovers.
    Are you ready for a new beginning?
    Love you,
    bw

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