That want and lust with anger
Torture and deeper pain
Why, I ask, is love
Malicious in it's fame
The covers drawn and I wait
But he is lost to games
Another shares his favors
I just share my shame.
I turn toward that bleak mirror
I see a face distraught
And wonder if i'll ever learn
That love cannot be bought.
By Bob Fox
A contest entry
- Pic Prompt by Riamh.
600 points, ended September 13, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Very nicely done! Something that is often done.. trying to buy love.. but it never can be can it!
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A lovely write, Bob..Your rhyming, flow and the truth of the pain shared is very powerful here..So often you bring out a vivid picture from your words and images you portray in your work which is uniquely yours..I feel your pain, and always know you are my friend! Bravo for this poem!
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I hate critics, that's why I try my best not to judge a poem or any other write by forms and patterns and other things that only ruin the beauty of poetry... So yes, I loved this..it's the raw truth and it takes curage to write it down in that way...that's admirable
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Good write. I like it. Best of luck,
Slayer
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Nice write a bit of a tear jerker but not quite like a country song. Good read, though I enjoyed it. Happy trails.
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no love cant be bought its got to be given
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"I turn toward that bleak mirror
I see a face distraught
And wonder if i'll ever learn
That love cannot be bought."
Too true, well, if it's the physical human type love you're looking for. Otherwise, just pay a trip to the local rescue centre, and you'll find unconditional love in all shapes, sizes, and ages
As always; nice job Bob; perfection in the rhyming, and wording, and everything
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this is interesting... a lesson you have learnt in your life, i presume? or not?... well written. i like the rhythm in here, well done!
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Very well done. I enjoyed this alot.
Mike
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Wow
Perfect just perfect. Best of luck not that you'll need it a job well done. Boog
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Spot on!
Love cannot be bought, you are so right in saying this and bravo for doing so.
Sad is any relationship where one person buys the other, that reduces the purity of love to a cheapskate bargaining affair.
This is a great poem with a lot of thought and feeling in it, and well penned too.
Best of luck in the contest hope you win!
Poetic Hugs,
Kaz.
Kazytc xx
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love cannot be bought Bob, neither can it be sold.
Love is not a game as you well know, I sometimes think its nothing more than a learning process. I wish you luck in the contest
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Strong and emotional write, Bob, and imbued with truth.
Very well done.
Good one,
Bill
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Never can buy love it comes through time. Friendship is a gift from one to another. Good luck in the contest.
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ahhh another good one by you. So true that love cannot be bought. good job. Good luck in the contest
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I like your take on the pic. Your words are emotionally strong just like the image depicts. A great write my friend, loved it...alby
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Is it 'compulsion' that is the driving force in these situations? It is a well thought out poem presented with excellence. The last stanza makes such a true statement.
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Sanity or vanity
which one would you choose...
would you walk in jesus' sandals
or my old walkin shoes...?
good take on the prompt Bob, xcuse me but I always seem to see some other kind of picture, but that's just me
Good luck buddy
John
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This is a great take on the prompt. Love the last stanza. Good luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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I learned the hard way that 'love cannot be bought'! I went broke looking "in all the wrong places"
Joe
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Wow, interesting take on the picture
I like the emotion that pours from your words. So intense! Excellent write, thanks for sharing this, and all the best in the contest,
Luck. -
EXCELLENT
No matter the price or the funds we have, that my friend can never be bought. Love is priceless.
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This was absolutely wonderful, and very true.
"I turn toward that bleak mirror
I see a face distraught
And wonder if I'll ever learn
That love cannot be bought."
This was AMAZING!
Great great job on this one!
You wait, one day you will be published! Your Awesome!
The title was very nicely put as well,
You'll do great in the contest.
God Bless,
N
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beautiful
intense, beautiful... full of emotion...its a feeling i understand for some reason really nicely done,,, good luck in the contest...
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