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~ Sun kissed ~

The sun will be your warm kiss
on my face

the rain will flow where your
fingers traced

the breeze will be your breath
on my skin

the moons shimmer will pull
me in

to the twilight where I know
you will be

I'll listen to her whisper as
you call out to me

as the darkness holds me in
a comforting embrace

I will lay with you until
the new dawn breaks

till the eyes of the night
sleep contentedly

from my dreams I will not stir
until the sun kisses me

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  • Dark Otter
    September 8, 2008

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    This is a new idea to me!

    I like how you equated a night on the beach to a romantic session with a lover . A good metaphor that you might one day choose to expand to its full poetential. It is an idea that should be made three dimensional and more vivid.


  • Ephiphany silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    Love it

    definately sun-kissed words in this piece. I have truly enjoyed your work sis keep being the beautiful person inside/out

    Much love,
    _Ephiphany_


    • onesugar gold member
      September 6, 2008
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      Thank you sis...it is always good to have you come by...your comments are always appreciated.
      Much love ~sugarcookie~

  • theredcatjazzoflove
    September 6, 2008

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    very nice picture here you put in one mind with thi story sug i think you did very great awesome job with this one


    • onesugar gold member
      September 6, 2008
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      Thank you hon for your constant support

      always a pleasure


      ~sugar~
  • midnightblue1272
    September 6, 2008
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    Pretty

    One of your best ones ever, sis. I can feel the love in this one. Good one, sis.


    • onesugar gold member
      September 6, 2008
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      Thanks bro

      always a pleasure to have you read

      your sis ~sugar~

  • Swtpoetryman
    September 6, 2008

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    SIMPLY BEAUTIFUL - and sounds like the poetry of a woman in love - to me!

    till the eyes of the night
    sleep contentedly

    from my dreams I will not stir
    until the sun kisses me

    A very beautiful piece, Sugar - that flows as smooth as whipped cream on hot chocolate with a flake which I know is one of your favorite treats. Thanks SO MUCH for sharing this one with me on this stormy Saturday which will be a lazy day for me to say the least! Wayne is a lucky man - if you ask me! HE! HE!
    Love & Peace!
    Earl.


    • onesugar gold member
      September 6, 2008
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      I am sweetie...we are both lucky. Thank you as always hon for your wonderful comment, and your constant support.

      Soon be hot choc and whipped cream weather whoohoo

      Love you ~sugar~ xxx
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