From a child to a woman magic does exist,
that is until man who changes her muse a bit.
Finding the world can bring the heart down,
from the visions of dreams now sorrow bound.
She dances into this life her beauty so displayed,
growing up yet understanding this world is a cruel place.
Unprepared she falls in love for the first time,
filling her heart with sorrow and tear filled eyes.
Man in their teachings taught to take and leave behind,
shatters the magic and the dreams of an angel so blind.
Author notes
Sex is and never was meant to be a game a tool for play and when will the adults of this world reallize for when they play all does cry and asking why
A contest entry
- Fantasy Picture Inspired Contest IV by ShelleyA.
1000 points, ended September 30, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice title. Interesting take on the picture prompt. Heartfelt. Very nice depth of feeling. Good flow and tone. Nice rhythm. Good word choice, nice alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.
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a sorrowful painting you've shown us with your pen. It reads well and has a soft tone! Best wishes in the contest!
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I like the style. Short, to the point, but long enough so it's still got a flow to it. Nice work. Love the emotion displayed in your words.
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okay..
So now now I am completely saddened..I truly love the mystery of magic..that's what caught my attention, but you got me with this one.
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The first few lines, I think I was expecting a more light-hearted poem. But the more I read the more I realized that this is not funny. It is heart breaking and brutal. But you did an incredible job on it. The flow was great and the rhymes were good.
Write on.
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Talk about love and hate
The lines truly express sorrow...Love that benefits the man..... Well done
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