evening sun sets on my restless mind
nightmares toss and turn as dusk closes in,
moonlight bathes derelict visions
finding no escape to numbness,
cause and effect rehashes old ghost
imprisoned in a soul of no return,
remorse splattered upon walls of guilt
haunting my every waking moment,
time lapses into rusted dreams
corroded by intentions less deserved,
emptiness follows me relentlessly
keeping one step ahead of peace,
and I wonder; does time ever forgive,
or will hell chase me evermore?
Author notes
Credit: The Brass Bed ~ By: Amit3
A contest entry
- The Brass Bed ~ Image Prompted by Ithica.
825 points, ended September 23, 2008, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This too is vivid and oh so real... an excellent piece.
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Thank you for bronze. I enjoyed your contest.
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Oh boy.. this cuts close to the bone.. I've had those nightmares follow me and plague me at times!!
Another fantastic dark piece!
(my gosh, how far behind am I with your writes??!!??!! lol)
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lol Someone was busy until I lost my muse, it's just beginning to come back to life.
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excellent~
Very impression
I think the poem goes with it perfect
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Your sis
Susan~~~
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Oh what an excellent dark piece you have penned here. The thoughts going through the mind in this are expressed most vividly and powerfully.
All the best with this
Gaylene
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and I wonder; does time ever forgive,
or will hell chase me evermore?
I too wonder...... i really like this write.... its awesome..... thanks for sharing this and good luck in contest.....! -
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I appreciate your comment, thank you so much.
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Wow! Nice job on this poem and you have given this picture an amazingly real voice. Impressing write and I wish you the best in the contest! Blessings, Patty
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Thank you for the kind comment my friend, much appreciated.
Linda
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