Belief blustered along determination's spine
as time drew circles with feral breath
and turbulent tales grew slowly still,
as tornado's thrust subsided.
And oh how blessed life became
in a hush of golden hue,
pursuing pleasure's promises fair
in the care of calm's caress.
Old woes had drowned upon grief's seas
as peace played perfect host
and treasures fell from fresher skies,
as pain faded...soon was lost.
Yet circumstances whipped complaints
as restraints ruled mighty dread
and honesty loomed in reality's grip,
till death blew on abandonment's ails...
and now as sorrow's span unwinds
so rainbows can tease such truths,
rain readily waits in draughty trance
for tempest's gale to one day cease.
Author notes
The theme is ... Wind
A contest entry
- Wind by Peteskid.
1000 points, ended September 15, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - BATTLE OF THE GOLDS THREE by Swan song.
2000 points, ended October 5, 2008, 47 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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a most excellent write
thank you for emtering my contest -
A very lovely and well penned poem! Thak you for your entry
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Love love love the way this moves and changes like the wind. The message is so relative to pretty much anyone, too. Emotive and strong. Wonderfully done.
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Oh this is quite delightful and your last stanza just ends this poem brilliantly. I did enjoy this so much. Congratulations on a well placed gold.
~Pamela 
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'determination's spine'
cool.
'feral breath'
cool...ER!
'in a hush of golden hue,'
very pretty.
'grief's seas'
I see you are liking the possessive form in this piece. Nice job with this one.
'rain readily waits in draughty trance'
My favorite part...
Well done!
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Another amazing write from you...
Your skills as a poet just leave me speechless sometimes.
I've got a quick question-- how do you submit your poems to be in the featured section?
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It is a skill, a powerful tool, to be able to change the pace and mood of a poem to fit the message and here in several parts it is done subtlely and masterfully, as the winds bring change...thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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Excellent poem simply devine good luck to you in this contest
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Wow!
This flows with flagrant thought-provoking force! I think I'll bookmark this. Peace
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