Fingers stroking your hair
Beautiful eyes stuck in a stare
I know this moment can't be real
Something like this is to good to feel
Luscious
Soft
Tender
Lips
Pressing against mine
Lying there holding you in the dark
Gazing at the glittering stars, lying at the park
Hoping this moment won't come to an end
I wake up wondering where we went wrong
I still feel your lips softly against mine
after several years of life, slowly went by.
A contest entry
- What Is A Kiss by nevadapoet.
700 points, ended September 8, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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good job dude
u need some new ones up
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awww i love this poem! i think it has to deffinitly(SP?) be one of your best. its sad but its sweet at the same time... bittersweet i guess is a better way to describe it.
Hoping this moment won't come to an end
I wake up wondering where we went wrong
i love these two lines, they describe life in general, you know, something that everyone goes through at least once in their lives. i know i hated going through it, not to mention im going through it again. its really good, and keep up the good work!
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I can feel it: it's too good, yeah! Luscious?! Wow! Good feel! Very romantic to be gazing at the glittering stars. But no.... fears come. I can feel the pain. Very truthful!
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a strong powerful write with great flow and imagery. A perfect entry for the contest...thank you. The pleasure was all mine.
Nevadapoet
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It is really intimate. Almost as if I could imagine myself there. The flow of this piece is nice and I admire your personal insight in your poems
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