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Looking Up

Stars in the night sky
One slips its mantle and falls
Wishes mark it gone.

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  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    October 18, 2008

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    Meteoric!

    What a great Haiku! I love every bit of this. Would have never taken you for a Haijin.


  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    October 18, 2008

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    Great stuff!!!

    Less is more...
    Great wordplay/choice/use...
    And follows the 575 of the traditional haiku...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • SmartBrick
    September 6, 2008
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    THIS WAS INCREDIBLE!LIKE OMG!!!PERFECT!