My life is like a flower mosaic.
Every day,
representing every new,
brightly colored tile.
Every day tells a different story.
Every tile,
shows a
different picture.
My life story, told by art.
My
secrets,
hidden underneath the tiles.
Surrounded by my family.
Gazing at
me with,
very proud eyes.
Every emotion, a different petal.
of the,
flower
mosaic.
But the gorgeous flower mosaic,
The beautiful work of art,
is not finished yet.
as a tile is added,
every day of my life.
Causing the flower,
mosaic, to
grow and
grow.
Author notes
This is my second freeverse. I used option #7. Mosaics are very beautiful and I am fortunate that my life is beautiful too. Every day is a new day. Every tile a new story beneath it. I am only 11 years old, So I have not been through very many bad experiences, so my mosaic is shaped as a flower, with only bright and warm colors.
A contest entry
- Mosaic by Ms. Black Eyeliner.
700 points, ended September 18, 2008, 27 entries
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What can I improve on?
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a musical piece...
& one easily put to music... loved it! You have a talent so WRITE ON!!!! dsp
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OMG this is brillient! this is way advanced brain wrinkling here
what an awesome metaphor that just bloomed into this gorgeous spirit lifty story of life 
i really love that secrets are hidden by the pretty tiles too 
lovely
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Beautiful! I love the idea, especially secrets hidden underneath the tiles. It's a little choppy, especially because you sort of overuse the commas, but otherwise, I love it! Great choice of words and everything.
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wow very ice i loved it you are a proe keep up the good write....
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Thankyou to everyone!!!
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Wow!! Its amazing!! Are you really 12? Wow, For when your 15 you'll be the best!!
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Hi yep I'm 12 now but when I wrote this I was 11.
Thanks for commenting!!!
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very nice poem i enjoyed it
i couldn't tell you were 12 wich is great
good luck in the contest
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OOOPS! I keep thinking I'm 12!!! Just telling you that I'm actually 11. That always happens to me!
Sorry,
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This is a good poem and for a free write and flows well! my only comment for improvement would be the way you have set it out the format makes it a bit harder to read and understand and takes away from the actual beautifulness and the imagery of what you are trying to say! thanks for sharing cheryl xx
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