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Henrietta and Eva

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Our corporate stage of serving is discrete,
and openly beguiled to helpfullness
implies to great austeres, directors meet
engulfing one's extreme to politeness,
at times, the silent qualms of Mandalay,
bring paradise to those with endless chores
as soul to soul terrains flow everyday
completes the social power by healing yours.

Assuming all the invites are in place,
where Eve and Henrietta stand, observed
a tier shall reappear though next to trace,
an email further stands as one reserved.

With accent as a dialect most distinct,
deliberating both as words of class,
invite a calm receiving flow of instinct
training thoughts on them as though surpass,
an elegancy swooned to worship them,
as benefactors measured by the pace
to which the greeting came, the often gem
includes the next time round in soft embrace.

Now Henrietta does the job of saints,
with patience and an attitude to match
variety of ways that these constraints
themselves do hardy disciplines attach. 

A worthiness conspired to nill achieve
with modesty to which conditions this
distinctive smile and awesome make believe
a fairytale evolves the purist bliss.

And Eve for all her worth has silent charm,
to reminisce a passion for dessert
the glow from which the everlasting calm,
befits by giving them her self alert. 


   

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  • Papabear 4 Rosered
    September 17, 2008
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    Very Good

    The use of rhyme scheme was inspiring. That pattern can become very difficult in longer poems such as yours. Very well executed. I tried a similar pattern with my recent poem "The Tale of a Good Man" but mine was much shorter, and as such I'm sure much simpler.