Plaguing me,
Hinting at short quickenings
And tangled pink fringe.
Vomited this mornings happenings
Marshmallows with
Tinted flare
Steaming and comforting
I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings
I choked on wing dust
As he brushed up on my skin.
When I gasped for air,
his
Eyelashes but fluttered.
The manufactured smell of nature
Lingered about his skin...
“his” touch causes heat stroke
But I’ve got frostbite
Author notes
math was boring
yeah...
A contest entry
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450 points, ended September 16, 2008, 19 entries
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450 points, ended October 16, 2008, 34 entries
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Oh my goodness
What an imagination and it was interesting just what was within each line good muse here
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you have a delightful muse in you....
I hear ya...mine sneaks out at the weirdest moments!
poor sad fella...frostbite was his reward!
ears/Seattle
have you tried lyrical writing.....i hear
fun and wild lyrics in your poems!
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no i havent but apparently i should?
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I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings
What a vivid image tha leaves for the readers to ingest and digest. Awesome. Good luck in the contest!! -
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thank you so much
=]
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I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings
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LOVE THAT!
and i love the giant metaphor with butterflies throughout this poem
this is one of my favs by you
its amaazing.
and the last line is wowww
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I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings
best lines
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i adore this part:
"I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings"
this amazing. as usual.
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heehe
did it again
hahah
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i adore this part:
"I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings"
this amazing. as usual.
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thank you so much
yay!!!
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Wow, love, this is amazinggg. I love it. Incredibly penned. You are getting so talented at writing hahah. I lovelovelove the metaphors in this piece.
-I have a translucent
Chest.
Lungs rise and crash with the batting of butterflies’ wings
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WONDERFUL. Flawlessly penned, my dear Keep it up & good luck in those contests ! 
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