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In a Bottle (Double Sonnets)

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In a bottle (Sonnet One)

 

Through crystal clear walls of glass I see you
As I am on the inside gazing out
Your body swaying to your song anew
But your mind, spirit, and soul start to doubt
You may cry for me with tears of meaning
Though I'm isolated inside my friend
The sun shines upon me intervening
So I can see many broken hearts mend
Souls in a bottle are still living souls
And some walking proud you may see blissful
The moral of this piece I pen unfolds
If your heart forever remains faithful
Indeed it looks from the outside one's free
Though the one with the golden heart I see

 

In a bottle… (Sonnet Two)

 

Circular glass, upon a stage of beige

Sitting with her hands towards heaven she prays

A golden chair beneath here thoughts of praise

Pondering today’s path from yesterdays

Seeing her youth dance nights away freely

Knowing roads before herself she followed

Like the daughter she embraces dearly

Wishing her life to never be shallow

So she gives her some wisdom with heart’s plea

Lovely is the home that shelters their own

Giving them all the love they’ll ever need

Though no matter if your thoughts are full grown

We all can still plant good seeds with good deeds

But parents hearts for their kids sometimes bleeds

Author notes

Enjoy Alix, and thanks for reading me.
This is a personal view that I wrote that basically means,
If you don't have a true heart, you are already lost...
And not living a life of meaning,
And feel closed in even if it looks like you're free.

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  • nevadapoet
    September 15, 2008

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    Wow I get it. Thank you for explaining and thank you for accepting our invitation.
    Alix...daughter of Nevadapoet

  • luvdrkchocolate
    September 9, 2008

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    Oh. This is a very sweet natured poem that you have penned in here. I think that it's always so great to see that someone writes a poem for someone else. It must be such a great feeling to know that someone thinks of you enough to write for you. I'm sure this person feels very special. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.


  • Stingersinger53 gold member
    September 6, 2008
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    This makes me think of our conversation the other night???? Great write!!!


  • banrion
    September 6, 2008
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    That's a wonderful interpretation of the pic. Best of luck.
    SJ


  • Stardust-luvr
    September 6, 2008

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    such a beautiful message spoken from the heart with the truest of compassion, faith, and promise. Your words as always speak in such profoundness leaving much to think in truthful wonder of the soul. I share your sorrows and youe joys with a everlastingly pure heart and spirit. I am not quite sure which brought me more tears the write or your author notes which said:
    If you don't have a true heart, you are already lost...
    And not living a life of meaning,

    you already know my true heart and more and yet i STILL often feel invisible and lost. well done and many loving blessings always xxxx Love you bunches best wishes xxxx Love sis- Star


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    September 5, 2008
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    this was wonderful
    it had a good flow to it and was enjoyable to read


  • thewhitesettler
    September 5, 2008
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    Nice work, it flows very well, and is an easy, pleasing read, good luck. Cheers Tws...

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