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When Angel's Cry

When Angel's cry
A storm will brew that night
Red tear drops turned wight
By the bright moon light

 

We will scream

As we dream

of fallen stares tonight

 

All is calm till

The angel's cry

they can be heard

from anywhere

nothing is safe

from the raft of the angels cry

 

When Angel's cry

men will die

and kids will follows the angels cores

as song will start

The song of the dying

 

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#27

A contest entry

i have not been able to write for awhile so im rusty if its bad tell me

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  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 19, 2008
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    When Angel's cry
    A storm will brew that night
    Red tear drops turned wightBy the bright moon light

    Just wondering, but the right make the reader ponder upon your imagery here, thanks for sharing daughter dear, and may you continue in the path of poetry.

    Timothy aka Daddio~


  • Dark Dragon of fire
    December 11, 2008
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    an interesting piece of no doubt.. an interesting writing always in route...


  • Mr. Bleu
    December 10, 2008
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  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    September 27, 2008
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    so sad...but so true
    reminds me of the saddest film I ever watched.


  • Resokona
    September 9, 2008
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    cool... i like very much


  • Silly Rabbit.
    September 7, 2008

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    I absolutely love the title and prompt... It's a beautiful theory in a way and a beautiful sight to imagine...
    You've done a great job with it.

    Keep it up and thanks for sharing.

    [[♥]]

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