That shining glory,
L
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O
K
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N
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at you,
within a simple grasp,
Your blood
[starts] to tingle,
flowing raidly through your skin,
~aching~ and ~begging~ for you to take that razor blade,
but ever so
g
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n
t
l
y
*slowly* but then roughly press it upon your skin,
then drag it through seeing and ^feeling^
that strong pain run through your wrist and down your spine...
watching that scarlet blood slowly yet rapidly seep through that unmarked scar,
it
R
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l
e
a
s
e
s
what you feel inside...
That anger, and sadness..gone,
but those scars are always a reminder of what you have ben through..
and those people
always telling you then go
K
I
L
L
yourself, if you hate life so much,
but no
we dont
because, we dont all want to die just yet..its just our problem solving method...
o so they can deal with my beauty marks,
think of me what u want,
because i dont care,
i am who i am and thats something you will never be,
and if cutting is part of it, then so be it.
its somethng that we cope with in our ow way and if you dont cut you have no i mean NO idea wat we go through.
Author notes
lianna27- option 4...ya im not quite sure what i think of this yet myself so any comments on how it cld be improved wld b greatly appreciated thanks
A contest entry
- cutters??? by Lonely Christina.
600 points, ended September 19, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tears Ran Dry, Echoes Of Sadness (( Give Me Dark, Creepy, Sad, Cutting, Suicide, Ex.)) by HereComesTheSun.
550 points, ended September 14, 2008, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - September is Suicide Awerness and Pervention Month by FallenFromGrace1102.
2620 points, ended October 3, 2008, 70 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Open up and give me emotion by Velvet Rose Petals.
1150 points, ended September 21, 2008, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what cha think?
Comments
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nice wording...i love the vertical effect it was interesting to say the least. I love the poem it was really well written...good luck,
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thanks so much!
-lindsay
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amazing!! perfect,powerful,nice,
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thanks for the comment!
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Wow, powerful. I can relate to this. Cutting is a coping skill, and I use it. It doesn't necessarily mean I want to die, and I like how you pointed that out. Awesome job.
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beatufiul write, I loved the way you wrote this, i've always cared for unique styles. It shows so much pain , and creativity. keep it up. I wish youthe best of luck in my contest and thank you for entering this piece. i really liked the lines:
"That anger, adn sadness..gone,
but those scars are always a reminder of what you have ben through..
and those people
always telling you then go
K
I
L
L
yourself, if you hate life somuch,
but no
we dont"
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love this poem keep it up
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so true... i feel the same exact way when i cut, also about the people who dont cut.
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thanks so much! glad u like it
-lindsay
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Wow,,,
I really feel this,,It reminds me of when i used to cut. U used so good of description,,""*slowly* but then roughly press it upon your skin,
then drag it through seeing and ^feeling^
that strong pain run through your wrist and down your spine...
watching that scarlet blood slowly yet rapidly seep through that unmarked scar"""
Just reading this reminds me of everything. People dont know how cutters feel and do if their actually not cutters ya know?
Good Job,,,i think this is one of the best cutting poems that iv read.
xoxoxo.
Cierra.
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I love this! It's a fantastic poem, and I love the way you stretch the words that are the most central to the sentence out vertically. It gets the emotions and the words across more effectively.
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i think this poem is amazing, the feelings you describe in it are so true and so intense, you clearly have a lot of talent and you are a very powerful writer, i like the style of it and how you have laid the poem out, all in all a very good piece of writing, well done.
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hey,i saw u wanted comments, and this is really good. exactly how i'm feeling right now. i like how u wrote it, the structure is awesome. keep up the good work
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i like it too. this is my kind of thing, it's a pretty good explanation of why you cut. if i had to do it, i'd say the same thing (not in the same context, but the same idea.). lovely, i think this is great. keep it up.
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i like this alot, it is filled with emotion and i lovew the dirty pretty form its written in, there are a few spelling mistakes and typos, but im one to talk on that stuff. i cant spell or type anywho, great poem i really liked it, you can feel the emotion.
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I like this, it is really good.
I think the way it is written is good, it made it interesting to read.
Good work! -
as if to be written about me
just truly understands the feeling of cutting and the acomplistment it saves from death
great job
a finalist for sure
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yay i love you girly! love the dirty pretty, love the details
amazing, how you said tht youre not ready to die its just ur coping method. the way you described the cutting process was graphic too, just how i like it! good job
xoxo- christina
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