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Always Get The Blame


tending to her heart
arrows softly thud into it
aims of those she loves
shooting into her softest part
yet the one most ungraded
fore who would think
they would be firing
these `'black'`

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dipped in poison
willing to hurt
one they claimed to love

 

what did she do ?

after all all she has ever done

is watched over everyone

helping ; Caring

soothing their hurts

no matter what she does

she will forever be the target

fore who would care

about a girl like her

 

always to blame..

even when she does {~nothing~}

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  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 11, 2008

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    I truly understand the way you feel in this write...I was that girl and never could understand why...very heartfelt and emtional write...nicely said in truth and sadness...
    Love,


  • Kinky Cuffs
    November 4, 2008

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    Nice!!! This was great!!! I loved it!!!! Strong emotion!!! My my the archer is a great aim!!!! I hope things get better!!!! If I can help in anyway I will!!!! Great write!!! Good description and detail. Great flow.


  • Sweet Impatience gold member
    October 31, 2008
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    wow sweetie you did an outstanding job with this poem. I really like this one. the emotions that I felt while reading this were intense. I used to be the girl who got blamed for everything.. but no more .. you've penned an excellent piece here.

    I love you
    mommy


  • aanika
    September 30, 2008

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    soothing their hurts
    no matter what she does
    she will forever be the target
    fore who would care
    about a girl like her


    nice.
    'fore' ==> 'for'


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    September 27, 2008

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    I think I'm most definately this girl myself, i hurt and yet I go through the worst things and people seem to blame me.


  • Hope Angel silver member
    September 21, 2008

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    Awwww
    It's hard when those we thought loved us hurt us the most.
    I hope you are ok. I love you


  • Iridessa MoonFlower
    September 14, 2008
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    Oh this is so sad. So real. I have felt this way so many times. Is someone hurting you? I will be so mad you are my sweet Emma. Someone that has the purest heart that I have ever known. The special person in my life that I truly have became to love. Someone that I wish was near, & I could hug. I love you! ~~Mommy~~


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 12, 2008

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    So hard when it's those close to us firing the arrows! Very real emotion! Excellent write sweetheart!


  • Dark Prince Chaos
    September 11, 2008
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    this peace was another sad one so emoshonal are you ok pleaase meassage me kay great work this is as art no more its better than art i truly loved this and how you worked it great work again i cant express how good this is best ive read in awile -bows- great work XD


  • HaileeDear
    September 9, 2008
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    wow, so powerful

    <3


  • Emberess
    September 8, 2008
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    Awww! Why? Great piece. Dripping with the emotion and thought that are behind it.


  • Angelflower
    September 8, 2008

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    this made me cry!! your never to blame for anything!! your a beautiful and tender angel!! my shadow angel!! And you are loved and cared by so many people!!! I love you hun!!

    Angel


  • VoltaicHypnosis gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    woah... this is so.... painful, really. Well written. For DP though, I reckon you could have been a little more artful - what you have is beautiful! But you could embellish more ^.^

    lovely write, well done and best of luck in the contest!


  • etoile
    September 7, 2008
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    the last few lines really hit hard.
    great take on the title prompt!

    no matter what she does
    she will forever be the target
    fore who would care
    about a girl like her
    ---
    i like that part the best .. but fore should be for
    goodluck in the contest.


  • Silly Rabbit.
    September 7, 2008

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    The last two lines hit me hard because I was always blamed for everyone else's problems...

    I love this... SO strong and sad and emotional... Overly beautiful.

    Keep it up and thanks for sharing.

    [[♥]]


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 7, 2008

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    Heartfelt and sad...but I love your creativity excellent! blessings always~ Auntie~


  • Sandygram silver member
    September 6, 2008
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    WONDERFUL POEM !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Hello sweet granddaughter. The form of your poem makes your words all the more heartfelt and sad. Sometimes those we love the most are the ones that hurt us the most. It hurts more because we never expect it till it happens. A wonderful write!! Take care.

    Bless You,
    Love you bunches,
    Grammy


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    September 5, 2008
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    very unique format you've used here
    well done, very creative


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    September 5, 2008
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    Creative.


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    September 5, 2008
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    Great poem best to you in the contest.

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