and I've got heart shaped teardrops
on the edges of all of my fingertips--
they're all I have left, they roll of
off my jaw and I'm catching them in my hands,
this isn't how it's meant to be[is it?]
the world's full of girls with flaws
and boys passed out on bathroom floors
but thats not how we're meant to be.
you and I. me and you. baby, we're meant
to be better than this. there's this great
void of silence passing through every minute--
I won't speak until you do.
a stubborn game of no kisses and no telling.
no giving and no sharing. distance is mean,
he's forever ridiculing us.[are we gonna make it?]
is the rain pounding on your eardrums too--
does it attack your heart with a beat, pushing it
to it's limits, dragging my name up from the silence?
i'm pressing my fingertips up against smeared stained mirrors,
taking my stolen shaped tears and pushing them into alice's wonderland.
Author notes
Love is not enough. It must be the foundation, the cornerstone - but not the complete structure. It is much too pliable, too yielding.
Bette Davis (1908 - 1989)
I'm not overly sure how I got this^^ from this^^ quote lol
but I hopes you like it 
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A contest entry
- Pick Your Own by Broken-Bones.
450 points, ended September 20, 2008, 36 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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the world's full of girls with flaws
and boys passed out on bathroom floors
but thats not how we're meant to be.
I really like that stanza. I think it's the imagery.
I also love:
'is the rain pounding on your eardrums too--
does it attack your heart with a beat, pushing it
to it's limits, dragging my name up from the silence?'
maybe instead of silence you could have quiet?
Great job, this was really good!
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do tell who this is for?
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I liked this alot. The quote you used was brilliant, Its funny how sometimes prompts (especially those based on love) can be take us in odd directions and I love the way you took it. I thought the image of the heart shapped teardrops was wonderful, it was a magical way of showing emotion and I loved the idea of catching them. The poem read really well and I really loved the image you create at the ending of pressing the tears against the mirror. This was a great write, keep the ink flowing x
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-is the rain pounding on your eardrums too--
does it attack your heart with a beat, pushing it
to it's limits, dragging my name up from the silence?
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Wowww. I read those lines are just holy geez. Incredible ! I loveloveloveee it :] Dang girlie you sure can write beautifully ! Keep it up =) ♥
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i aboslutely lovelovelove this.
its beautiful and thoughtful.
bookmarked for sure!!!
iloveyou
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I like this! You have expressed yourself clearly and concisely. Yet it still carries such honest emotion. Well done!
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Mmkayyy. I really liked this, the imagery and everything is beautiful.
&& my eyes are racing across the screen
hungrily devouring your words;;
as neurons click inside my brain,
sending messages to my fingertips
as I type to you [I wish I could write like this]
Best of luck in the contest ♥
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