It is a mystery
where we were before this life
Was my soul dancing in heaven
to the sound of your beautiful voice?
What I called love wore a mask behind
a different face all those many years
I never reached up, out
until friendship joined our names in the stars.
I may be autumn to your late summer
but spring dawns daily in my heart.
You complete the circle I have trudged
taking up the march
carry everything heavy I have owned
healing me under the moonlight.
Author notes
My husband is a wonderful man.
A contest entry
- ~ You Complete Me... by Nature Song.
515 points, ended September 22, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please critique the highs and lows! How does this make you feel? Where does this hit you?
Comments
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This is stunning lass....
I love how it begins.....
your level of thought is high....
so nice to be believed in....
to believe in someone else.....
to hold the torch when your down....some one to carry it when your gone.
I am simply speechless at the beauty and thought and heart that went into these words.
May your star
always shine
bright lass,
Lowell
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Lovely
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You love for your husband shines through your words in this write. Great work
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Thank you so much! Thanks for reading.
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How Romantic!
Aren't you the fortunate woman! 
You sound like a newly married, who was in a friendship with your mate for a while before marrying. That's great cause marriage should be between the best of friends! 
I may be autumn to your late summer
but spring dawns daily in my heart.
Sounds like you're older than hubby? Lots of men really enjoy being with an older woman, & woman can sure enjoy & have fun with a younger man! 
You complete the circle I have trudged
and take up the march
carry everything heavy I have owned
and heal me under the moonlight.
Love this! I've got a couple of suggestions:
You complete the circle I've trudged,
taking up the march;
carry everything heavy I've owned,
healing me under the moonlight.
Bravo!
Long live love...
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Thankyou, I took your suggestions, very nice edit! Thanks for reading and the comments and additions, I appreciate it!
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Thank you so much, yes we are newlyweds, started out as best friends. He is definitely the one I am to spend my life with. and yes, I am a bit older and I believe that is the way of the future, to save our society!! Hurrah to older women/younger men!! Anyway, thank you so much again, and thankyou for your critique! have a great day!
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Heal me under the moonlight, for we know what we were before this life. For as the season's pass you complete me. Lovely poem, very well written. Godo luck in our contest ~Sie
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Lovely Poem!!!!!!
This was such a beautiful poem that touches the heart when read. A delight to read. Thank you for sharing your happiness and love for your husband. Take care. Bless you both.
Sandy
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Sandy, thank you for reading this personal poem. I am blessed daily by being loved by such a good-hearted soul and I know God brought us together. Sometimes I just have to attempt to express these blessings in writing. I truly appreciate your comments! Have a beautiful day.
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You are very welcome. It was a pleasure to read. Nice to read a happy love poem. Sandy
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Sweetly, tenderly and deeply expressed...
Be ever blessed in union,
Rahad
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Rahad, thank you so much for reading and the uplifting comment and blessing. Have a beautiful day. -Kenlo Ann
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It certainly seems like you have the deepest heartfelt emotional attachment to this fortunate man. I'm sure he is most aware and grateful.
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Thank you so much for the lovely comment. I try daily to make sure he is confident in how I feel.
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