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Being without you

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I am absent from my self for we are one,

As the hours pass in this stillness there’s

No one to hold on to, only the deafening

Silence, its screams I am lonely with out

You.

 

Thoughts of you press against my heart,

They claim all of me not in part. holding

on to visions of a past that has yet to

become our future, will we last?

 

 

The times that you’re away should I be

Confident your heart will stay or will

    It slowly leave like time passing away

and not grasp onto anything.

 

 

Will you be the morning sun rising up

to greet me, lying here waiting for you

 filling me completely, For I am absent

from my self for we are one “My Love”

please don’t leave  I couldn’t bare

another night with out you.

 

 

Loneliness swallows me whole, it brings

every thought I have out into the open,

makes me feel weak and needful, every

secure thought about our love is contradicted,

nothing is real to me only the deafening

silence of loneliness and being with

out you,

 

 

 

Rend the Veil

Author notes

Ophelia’s John William Waterhouse
left alone with just thoughts running through my head,
you have no idea what i am going through, what was started
has now ended, pain of seperation is what i face now..
are the thoughts of Ophelia as she lays waiting for her Hamlet


Rend

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  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 29

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    My first read of your poem.... How you bare your heart here....I understand where you are coming from, luv...Love will be yours I know someday soon! Mom


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 26, 2008
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    Hrmmmmm
    I cant believe you didnt get a shinny gold for this Rend,
    *Marching off to ask PradhuDayal Khattar what the hells goin on here* LOL
    Excellent piece of poetry, and i see that Sandygran thinks so too, and her judgements are always correct.

    Thanks for sharing this Rend

    Blessings

    Ken


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      September 26, 2008
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      your so funny!

      My Champion! my knight! that was way too funny as always you have a way of making me laugh, good friends are an inspiration to the soul!


      Blessings Ken

      Rend


  • poppa
    September 11, 2008
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    Wow... I know this feeling ... the pain when we give ourselves to another, only to have them reject us, can be quite devastating... loneliness is an insipid beast, and all it does is degrade ones own self confidence... heartfelt write that rings home to me
    good luck in your contest


    • Rend the Veil gold member
      September 11, 2008
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      thank you

      Rob,
      you saw what my heart was saying!
      i appreciate your comments my friend especially after reading yours, i am honored


      Rend


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    September 8, 2008

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    Will you be the morning sun...How romantic! This is beautifully penned with much thought of what a lover can be...


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    Humm..Rend..you have put your heart in the words..and each word has a one each heart here..bringing the depth and the message of your inside....I love it..well done..and thank you so much for sharing..and entring in my contest...


  • Godless But Divine gold member
    September 6, 2008

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    Hooked the breath like a thief at night
    higher you are rising without height
    what you seek has only one trace
    to love completely and have faith...

    Bachir


  • Dajuan
    September 6, 2008

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    This should win

    A poem of a lover's devotion.How she based her dream towards.Given herself compeletly, only by his choice to now end it.
    She became one,she lost somewhat of what she was.
    Found herself weak and needy.
    Great poem Rend


  • Sandygram silver member
    September 6, 2008

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    Wonderful Poem

    Oh this was one of the loveliest love poems I have read on here. This so deserves the GOlD. A lovely picture to compliment these words. You take care, Sandy

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