My steps climb to heaven,
a waltz that never ends
Arthritic legs rejuvenate.
A splash of moonlight sends
me to the love of dance,
no man here but a solo romance.
I sway and dip by the light of the stars,
Saluted by Jupiter, cheered by Mars.
A contest entry
- ~ You Complete Me... by Nature Song.
515 points, ended September 22, 2008, 14 entries
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So, what's your opinion of this?
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Interesting take on the prompt for this contest. A solo sance under the moonlite sky! Good luck in our contest. ~Sie
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Never give in to the arthritic legs, they should rejuvenate so you can be;"Saluted by Jupiter, cheered by Mars". Well done.
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Oh I love that closing line!!!
That is a great inspirational short poem.
I appriciate brevity and the power of it
Well done thank you for the entry in my contest
Delila -
I like this, sis. "Saluted by Jupiter, cheered by Mars." Nice. Write on and good luck. One.
Dez
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such a beautiful sadness here, even though the narrator doesn't see it at all. Good luck in contest.
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Wonderful rhyme, very fanciful piece. I love this! Best of luck.
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This was a beauty to read...I mean the rhyming scheme was awesome and I loved these lines the most"My steps climb to heaven,a waltz that never ends..."I Loved this!!!Great job.
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This poem is creative, i love the way you talk about the planets dancing and the mars, and all that stuff, a lot more romantic then my cliche entry,
good luck in the contest
and as always keep up the wonderful writing,
~Amy
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