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Breathe

Swim through another lit up cigarette
As you try to relax, try to breathe
Filled lungs satisfy an empty heart
It's enough to sweep you off your feet
You’re sitting two clouds above seven
Hands over your head, head on your knees
As you try to relax, try to breathe
Just try to breathe

You’re world is crashing down, all around
Hands in the air, to surrender, but it never
Gets any better, gets any better for you                   

And just breathe, as I untangle your heart
Just breathe, as we all watch you fall
Fall apart

Grab another pen as you try to breathe
Try to relax and try to speak
With words just what exactly does your heart mean
Filled pages satisfy an empty heart
It’s just another prayer, another hole in the sky
Exhale your clouds and inhale the night
As you try to relax, try to breathe
Just try to breathe

You’re world is crashing down, all around
Hands in the air, to surrender, but it never
Gets any better, gets any better for you

And just breathe, as I untangle your heart
Just breathe, as we all watch you fall
Fall apart

You’re falling through cracks in the ground
You’re reaching but nothing is found
Still standing short as you try to be more
Try to be more, than who you are

And just breathe as I untangle, your heartstrings
Of broken promises and half-hearted lies
I’ll untangle your life, for you
So just breathe, just breathe

And you’re world is crashing down, all around
Hands are in the air, to surrender, but it never
Gets any better, gets any better for you

And just breathe
I’ll untangle your heart
Just breathe
As we all watch you fall
You’re falling apart

Author notes

acoustic
maybe option #2? lol it's ok if you don't think it fits
i just really wanted to ever cause there are like never any lyric contests and thats really all i like writing so thanks!

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Comments


  • Raspy
    May 8

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    Nice Write

    This certainly got me trying to breathe,breathe,and breathe.
    You struck many nerves,and got straight to the point. I enjoyed reading this. Well done.


  • second-born
    November 8, 2008

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    WOW...this is so beautiful...very inspiring and very sincere...truly someone would 'breathe' easily if they have someone like you as a friend...thank you for sharing this mangnificent piece!


  • whiterabbit.
    September 6, 2008

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    I really love this. I can relate to a lot of feelings in this and I can picture myself here. This is so well written and the emotions show through so vividly. Wonderful job and thanks so much for entering.