I sailed to the horizon
to see the sun
setting its day
on the tiny ocean line
I watch how lights changed from bright
to dark tones
as the silence buried
the afternoon
then the ocean stopped moving
and only an immense saudade
was left within me
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Ah..the imaginative truth you have crafted to bring the universal truth around the words..love its depth and its flow as well..well done...
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Saudade... Such beautiful words that can give those happy, yet sad feelings at the same time...
I hate it actually, I don't know how to handle them
I never could... and probably never will.
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It seems to fit today. Here's hoping the trip eases that feeling, or gives room to happiness.
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Oh and that word pops out. I read this and on a whim I too travelled to the ocean, I was disappointed for the sign said, "Come back at sunrise or journey to the other side. Silly man." ---- You write with beauty, hold the imagination; Ms Mari. --- Thank you.
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I read this and I have to read your Column Saudade...which made me smile...
This is truly truly deep Mari. I have learned something new here... ah! Saudade...it is something intrinsic; deeply rooted within us yet undefined...and only our hearts know what it is...but a smile on our face that came from it...is the sign of approval that we know...as we just let it be...we don't need to understand it; we just have to feel it.
This is something to smile about before I go to sleep...
Anna Lee -
a dear friend, relative, someone close, and when they leave us we can find them in feelings ...in a sunset, in light upon water... and a deep feeling of something that will never be seen again... sunsets, because no matter how beautiful we can never have them back again... beautiful poetry...Saudade...h
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"as the silence buried
the afternoon
then the ocean stopped moving
and only an immense saudade
was left within me"
I love this. I feel like this is a day you didn't want to end
lovely poetry, Mary
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From recent reading, it seemed a saudade
was so sad, hopeless, looking to the past.
But then I read this gem
and feel the time stopping swell,
almost unexplainable.
This "sail" is art!
M-C
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I can borrow from this...and I will.
I mean the tone, and the immensity within...you won't even know it when I steal it.
Simplicity...it expresses so easily, that I need to learn. will see...and how to express emotion in symbolism...will steal that too,
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Excellent, a very impressive write. It's rich in visual beauty as well as the feeling, the texture of a saudade.
This inspires me to write a saudade
A wonderful piece of pioetry
Dee
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